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DESERVING NOTHING MORE THAN LONLYNESS (Free verse) by LETO
Forever Alone were are you my butifule a hiden love in the mist of shadow nowhere to be found the next month or tomorow alone standing ,with in my own grasping, awaiting a hiden hand from a nonexistent love a reacuring dream reminding me of a burnet with bright blue eyes same as the one that disapearing i left forever alone BURNET WITH A BROKEN HEART leaving her behind somthing to regret forever never forgeting that sadness for all eternity is none then my own fault leaving my loving burnet with eyes of the sky brokenhearted is something ill regret all time FOREVER REGRET the oposite of regret that never ends a sparkile in the eyes of my beloved reflection of somthing long forgoten pain coused that unlike her present i will forever have to live with MISTAKES OF THE PAST a mistake of past ingnorence still huanting my thoughts today teaching me that inwich i truly want only reminds me of a mistake echoing my past A VISION OF THE END unhapily moving forward with only sweatness of death incouraging a future that will end visions of lonlyness with my hope of seing you again dwindiling a vision of the end opens my veiw for a new love

Up the ladder: Don't Think Of Me
Down the ladder: Forwords

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.875
Weighted score: 4.697441
Overall Rank: 12028
Posted: December 19, 2002 4:35 PM PST; Last modified: December 19, 2002 4:35 PM PST
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Comments:
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 19-Dec-02/6:18 PM | Reply
"sweatness of death" vintage.
[n/a] LETO @ 66.57.41.158 > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 19-Dec-02/8:21 PM | Reply
THANX
[6] New Life Drug @ 64.175.38.129 | 19-Dec-02/7:28 PM | Reply
hated it
[n/a] LETO @ 66.57.41.158 > New Life Drug | 19-Dec-02/8:23 PM | Reply
HARSH
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 | 19-Dec-02/7:36 PM | Reply
I counted 20 spelling errors. Do I win a prize? Is he a mad genius or just in need of a spellchecker?
[n/a] LETO @ 66.57.41.158 > Bill Z Bub | 19-Dec-02/8:23 PM | Reply
ALMOST BUT YOUR FORGETING CAPATALIZATION
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > LETO | 19-Dec-02/8:28 PM | Reply
Drat!
I'll get you someday, LETO!
SOMEDAY!
NOOOOOOOOOOOO!
(lower curtain)
(end of act 1)
thank you ! thankyou!
Yes, I am quite the thesbian.
I mean, thespenian.
No, thistlepen!
Ack, thestplenisthle!
THESPIAN!
[0] poetandknowit @ 67.40.59.227 | 19-Dec-02/9:06 PM | Reply
Have you ever considered learning to spell before subjecting us to this crap?
[n/a] Another Bobjim?!?! @ 212.219.142.161 > poetandknowit | 20-Dec-02/12:48 AM | Reply
Have you considered learning how to write?
[0] poetandknowit @ 67.40.59.92 > Another Bobjim?!?! | 20-Dec-02/8:42 AM | Reply
This coming from some doof who hasn't posted a poem. So I say to you: are you joking kind sir? Have you read my stuff? Because if you have, you would realize how foolish this statement looks. Would you consider answering an ad to be slaughtered? And the let some chap surgically remove your testacies. Pop them in the over for a good bake and the sit down for a snack. My friend, this is what the world has come to. Yes, yes. Indeed.
[6] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 20-Dec-02/5:13 AM | Reply
a good poem but marred by interruptions while reading due to the grammar, spelling. I too have been damned for the same wrong, not bad -6-
[3] god'swife @ 209.179.137.35 | 20-Dec-02/9:11 AM | Reply
Fixing the grammer and the typos would be like giving Quasimoto hearing-aids. He'd be better off, but still very very ugly.
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