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the feeling was never there (Free verse) by blackball
i looked toward the sun soaked sky waiting for you to come home with bad news i shuddered, standing alone in a defunct cabin that was bordered by a lake an island, blanketed with human feet, strands of grass and love hoping that you might never have to come back praying for a moment in time where you might be belligerent to the awful truth realizing that the black-red sky was leading you home to an empty bed empty besides me empty because when i told you i loved you, i lied

Up the ladder: Misplaced admoration
Down the ladder: untitled (readjuster)

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.714286
Weighted score: 4.9231596
Overall Rank: 9399
Posted: December 19, 2002 10:00 PM PST; Last modified: December 19, 2002 10:00 PM PST
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[8] Ranger @ 212.219.142.161 | 20-Dec-02/4:15 AM | Reply
Not bad, my friend, not bad at all. I like the line "praying for a moment..."
8/10
[n/a] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 20-Dec-02/4:43 AM | Reply
Distinctive,poignant a fine read -8-
[n/a] scitz @ 62.105.88.10 | 20-Dec-02/10:07 AM | Reply
NICE
[9] razorgrin @ 192.197.142.146 | 23-Dec-02/9:28 AM | Reply
awesome, sir.
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