| Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w |
14-May-04/5:50 AM |
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s-6 L-1 hiccup. Nicely done.
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| Re: Random by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
13-May-04/7:01 PM |
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For accuracy, 10. For myself,0
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| Re: A Year Later (edited a bit) by Sasha |
13-May-04/6:49 PM |
Maryland? So close to the capital, too.
My condolences.
Quality vill though.
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| Re: a comment on As You Are by MacFrantic |
13-May-04/2:07 PM |
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Yes, I would certainly tell you if you had. While I would like to appreciate the wing-ed one's Jodhpurs, (they are rather supportive, you know) I can't tell one -=Dark-Angel=- from another lately. so sad.
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| Re: FINGER PIE by titan69 |
13-May-04/6:42 AM |
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| Re: Dial Tone by cuddlytiger17 |
12-May-04/6:05 PM |
Suggestion:
Listening to the phone's monotone.
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| Re: As You Are by MacFrantic |
12-May-04/1:24 PM |
Whitman-esque, painful, honest. very good.
Unfinished.
Take your last three lines, extend the first two and use the last as the closer of the second. I'm sure you're exhausted. Catch your breath, spool up, and go.
holding vote.
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| Re: Kept by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
11-May-04/1:55 PM |
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| Re: selfhood, through extrospection by nentwined |
11-May-04/5:45 AM |
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I have no clue what this means other than the closing line. Still, I like it's originality. Particularly the beat.
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| Re: a comment on Spring Cleaning by horus8 |
10-May-04/6:38 PM |
I can't speak for Hypatia, but as for me:
Can't. That's a monster that comes with a long long line of tequila shooters that leads into a tunnel that I have seen very few return from. My poetry will therefore, suffer.
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| Re: a comment on forwards by nentwined |
10-May-04/12:05 PM |
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Well, Just don't give up. That's all I ask.
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| Re: a comment on forwards by nentwined |
10-May-04/6:46 AM |
How can you say that when you know full well poetry is subjective?
One mans trash,blah blah blah.
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| Re: a comment on forwards by nentwined |
10-May-04/6:42 AM |
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Upon another reading, I would like to recind my variation of the ending.
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| Re: Fighting before bed by zodiac |
10-May-04/6:39 AM |
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It's hard for me to believe that anyone could find fault in this. Yet someone with more knowledge than I, might.
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| Re: a comment on Trapped in a horseshoe by INTRANSIT |
9-May-04/5:51 PM |
Good calls. all of them. How about Z's suggestion? Maybe a line break there, sans the exclam, of course.
a Bounty of thanks to you.
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| Re: Spring Cleaning by horus8 |
9-May-04/5:35 PM |
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Would you like me to be less generous and more critical more often?
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| Re: a comment on Spring Cleaning by horus8 |
9-May-04/5:34 PM |
Sometimes, coping through our poetry is best. Most of us do that.
Do not be ashamed. GET NUDE!!!
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| Re: a comment on Spring Cleaning by horus8 |
9-May-04/5:32 PM |
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Yes. I'd still like to know the reason behind such pain. but that's me and it does work without it. I'm nosy like that.
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| Re: Obituary for the Moon by wilco |
9-May-04/4:20 PM |
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Groovy. 'Rita, please. no salt.
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| Re: Spring Cleaning by horus8 |
9-May-04/4:18 PM |
I hate to be picky but the lack of reason bugs me. Failed marriage? Death? Who would be around to watch?
Sorry.
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