on The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
14 May 2004, 5:50 AM
s-6 L-1 hiccup. Nicely done.
on Random by <{Baba^Yaga}>
13 May 2004, 7:01 PM
For accuracy, 10. For myself,0
on A Year Later (edited a bit) by Sasha
13 May 2004, 6:49 PM
Maryland? So close to the capital, too.
My condolences.
Quality vill though.
My condolences.
Quality vill though.
replying on As You Are by MacFrantic
13 May 2004, 2:07 PM
Yes, I would certainly tell you if you had. While I would like to appreciate the wing-ed one's Jodhpurs, (they are rather supportive, you know) I can't tell one -=Dark-Angel=- from another lately. so sad.
on FINGER PIE by titan69
13 May 2004, 6:42 AM
(A women)?
on Dial Tone by cuddlytiger17
12 May 2004, 6:05 PM
Suggestion:
Listening to the phone's monotone.
Listening to the phone's monotone.
on As You Are by MacFrantic
12 May 2004, 1:24 PM
Whitman-esque, painful, honest. very good.
Unfinished.
Take your last three lines, extend the first two and use the last as the closer of the second. I'm sure you're exhausted. Catch your breath, spool up, and go.
holding vote.
Unfinished.
Take your last three lines, extend the first two and use the last as the closer of the second. I'm sure you're exhausted. Catch your breath, spool up, and go.
holding vote.
on Kept by <{Baba^Yaga}>
11 May 2004, 1:55 PM
Excellent.
on selfhood, through extrospection by nentwined
11 May 2004, 5:45 AM
I have no clue what this means other than the closing line. Still, I like it's originality. Particularly the beat.
replying on Spring Cleaning by horus8
10 May 2004, 6:38 PM
I can't speak for Hypatia, but as for me:
Can't. That's a monster that comes with a long long line of tequila shooters that leads into a tunnel that I have seen very few return from. My poetry will therefore, suffer.
Can't. That's a monster that comes with a long long line of tequila shooters that leads into a tunnel that I have seen very few return from. My poetry will therefore, suffer.
on Fighting before bed by zodiac
10 May 2004, 6:39 AM
It's hard for me to believe that anyone could find fault in this. Yet someone with more knowledge than I, might.
replying on Trapped in a horseshoe by INTRANSIT
9 May 2004, 5:51 PM
Good calls. all of them. How about Z's suggestion? Maybe a line break there, sans the exclam, of course.
a Bounty of thanks to you.
a Bounty of thanks to you.
on Spring Cleaning by horus8
9 May 2004, 5:35 PM
Would you like me to be less generous and more critical more often?
replying on Spring Cleaning by horus8
9 May 2004, 5:34 PM
Sometimes, coping through our poetry is best. Most of us do that.
Do not be ashamed. GET NUDE!!!
Do not be ashamed. GET NUDE!!!
replying on Spring Cleaning by horus8
9 May 2004, 5:32 PM
Yes. I'd still like to know the reason behind such pain. but that's me and it does work without it. I'm nosy like that.
on Obituary for the Moon by wilco
9 May 2004, 4:20 PM
Groovy. 'Rita, please. no salt.
on Spring Cleaning by horus8
9 May 2004, 4:18 PM
I hate to be picky but the lack of reason bugs me. Failed marriage? Death? Who would be around to watch?
Sorry.
Sorry.