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Spring Cleaning

by horus8

Member since 2002 · Posted 9 May 2004 · Edited 9 May 2004 · 11 comments

Let me empty out the garage, and reminisce. Let me empty out the closet, and make a list. Let me empty out the house, as promised... Then let me wrap my mouth around this cold barrel & paint.

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11 comments

[10] INTRANSIT 9-May-04/4:18 PM Reply
I hate to be picky but the lack of reason bugs me. Failed marriage? Death? Who would be around to watch?

Sorry.
[n/a] horus8 › INTRANSIT 9-May-04/4:42 PM Reply
Let me empty out the garage,
and reminisce.
Let me empty out the closet,
and make a list.
Let me empty out the house,
as promised...

Then let me wrap my mouth
around cold barrel & paint.
[n/a] horus8 › INTRANSIT 9-May-04/4:42 PM Reply
Better?
[10] INTRANSIT › horus8 9-May-04/5:32 PM Reply
Yes. I'd still like to know the reason behind such pain. but that's me and it does work without it. I'm nosy like that.
[5] deleted user 9-May-04/5:22 PM Reply
If this helps you to cope, good. I fail to see any other use for it. I suppose the same could be said for most of mine.
[10] INTRANSIT › deleted user 9-May-04/5:34 PM Reply
Sometimes, coping through our poetry is best. Most of us do that.
Do not be ashamed. GET NUDE!!!
[n/a] horus8 › deleted user 9-May-04/10:53 PM Reply
See, unlike you friend, this has nothing to do with me?
Why you would think it helps me cope is exactly what's wrong with your work. I don't necessarily have to include myself in my work, or my message. I approach poetry like a bad novelist. Which allows me to completely get into character without pulling a Silvia Plath down the toilel.
The majority of my work is done from an angle that allows me to not be 'SO' involved, try it.
[10] Shuushin › horus8 10-May-04/3:51 AM Reply
This "getting into character" is one of the biggest appeals of this poetry thing - I do it too.

Sure, some things are true - the whole ass-raped with a jackstand thing, for example - but who can make stuff like that up and make it :believeable:?
[10] INTRANSIT › horus8 10-May-04/6:38 PM Reply
I can't speak for Hypatia, but as for me:

Can't. That's a monster that comes with a long long line of tequila shooters that leads into a tunnel that I have seen very few return from. My poetry will therefore, suffer.
[10] INTRANSIT 9-May-04/5:35 PM Reply
Would you like me to be less generous and more critical more often?
[10] Shuushin 10-May-04/3:48 AM Reply
Lemme guess - red?

Excellent.