replying on Decks of Cards (So Long to the City) by wilco
5 Jun 2004, 4:19 PM
Not half bad in my op.
on The butchers consolation (Kyrielle) by SupremeDreamer
5 Jun 2004, 2:51 PM
Gangs of New York, all gussied up. Listen and fix the hiccups.
on A Hick's Rendition of "Fire and Ice" by Enkidu
5 Jun 2004, 2:41 PM
Of the two, this ones funnier. If they ever see a book, they should be on the same page or back to back.
on A short trip home by titan69
5 Jun 2004, 2:37 PM
Does the figure wear a tall hat? Is it cloaked in a cloak? Is it arm-ed with prawnes? Scary indeed.
on Solipsistic, Drunk, But Still Friends by horus8
5 Jun 2004, 11:38 AM
You chose not to capitalize (howl). Interesting.
I think I need some Poundage myself.
I think I need some Poundage myself.
replying on Dear Lord, by INTRANSIT
2 Jun 2004, 5:39 PM
Thanks. My wife is posting for me. Somebody's getting their nipples tweaked when I get home. Maybe this poem.
on Oomphless by shwenatjadeflower
16 May 2004, 6:31 PM
Drop the last line.
replying on Truckers should not be poets by INTRANSIT
16 May 2004, 6:29 PM
I posted it some time ago, and I've been sitting on it until I felt like tuning it a little. The middle lines didn't rhyme before and It makes more sense with the tweaks. It beats better now too. I'll twist 'er nips a little more some other time. Thanks for yours. It asks for the context of p/r? wha?
on Tripping Through A Paper Square by Shardik
16 May 2004, 5:25 AM
more hyphens! smash the molds!!
on Weened by Jeremi B. Handrinos
16 May 2004, 5:23 AM
Freaky when something doesn't get any comments. I think it's fine. Quite good actually.
on In the Land of Bob by Bobjim
14 May 2004, 7:56 PM
Congratulations. You went for poetry, and got humor. I went for humor, and wound up glancing off an udder into the far reaches of the galaxy. Cows happen.
replying on Lips no longer innocent by tre
14 May 2004, 7:46 PM
your generosity exceeds mine own.
replying on Bashing through the woods by INTRANSIT
14 May 2004, 7:44 PM
WAIT!! DON'T FALL FOR IT!! IT'S JUST A DIVERSIONARY TICTAC!!
AAAAARRRRGGGGHHHHH!!!
AAAAARRRRGGGGHHHHH!!!
on Bashing through the woods by INTRANSIT
14 May 2004, 10:53 AM
This is profiling. And profiling is wrong.
on Diane Keaton's Tits by JoyLuck
14 May 2004, 6:16 AM
Wow. I guess there really isn't enough room for I have a fat back. I thought bins were bigger. hmmm.
on untitled: dedicated to my soldier/husband by SweetJuliet10
14 May 2004, 6:14 AM
I'M GOING TO THROW YOU A LIFE PRESERVER!!! PUT IT ON!!!
Buy a copy of : Poetry for dummies. No, I'm not kidding. and some poetry to read. rummage through the section at the library for something you like. read. practice. Then rewrite this and do your Valiant husband the justice he deserves. Because, while heartfelt, this is not poetry. Most 'rankers will write 10 pieces, only one of which will be worth rewriting or posting. Get used to it. It's work.
Buy a copy of : Poetry for dummies. No, I'm not kidding. and some poetry to read. rummage through the section at the library for something you like. read. practice. Then rewrite this and do your Valiant husband the justice he deserves. Because, while heartfelt, this is not poetry. Most 'rankers will write 10 pieces, only one of which will be worth rewriting or posting. Get used to it. It's work.
replying on The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
14 May 2004, 5:59 AM
fair...equity... a bit of a reach but no more hiccup so, yes.
Perfection is mostly persued by those who wish to do harm to others.