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untitled: dedicated to my soldier/husband (Free verse) by SweetJuliet10 sitting here tonight alone in bed
a million things running through my head
what i did or didnt say
things i should have done that day
oh how id pay to rewind time
even for my last dime
i wish for just one more moment, just us
i get so angry i start to cry
and so sad i start to cuse
i believe in the fight that you fight
i know you are only doing what is right
i am honored to be your wife
but sometimes the heartache custs like a knife
i know you will come home from this war
dont worry babe, ill be fighting the guards at the door!
Up the ladder:
We are what we hold
Down the ladder:
Night On the Town
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.2222223
Posted: May 13, 2004 11:49 PM PDT; Last modified: May 14, 2004 12:04 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.611111 Overall Rank: 2273 Comments:
Thoughts (Free verse) by nicole081083
As I lie here in my bed Many thoughts run through my head ---------------------------------------- wait for sleep (Lyric) by xunitedx i wait for sleep as i'm lying in my bed but i can't stop these thoughts from running through my head ---------------------------------------- Insomnia (Pimple) by BiggRobb Every night that I lay down to bed, I'm constantly bombarded with thoughts racing through my head; ---------------------------------------- Adam's Apple (Lyric) by hotwire Not enough words rush through my head as I laid spend there in my bed ---------------------------------------- Falling in Love (Free verse) by disturbedone182 I lie awake for hours upon my bed While thoughts of her race through my head ---------------------------------------- untitled: dedicated to my soldier/husband (Free verse) by SweetJuliet10 sitting here tonight alone in bed a million things running through my head -10-
very funny this one. Untitled, followed by a title.
if i had not read this, i would not believe that it could be written.
I'M GOING TO THROW YOU A LIFE PRESERVER!!! PUT IT ON!!!
Buy a copy of : Poetry for dummies. No, I'm not kidding. and some poetry to read. rummage through the section at the library for something you like. read. practice. Then rewrite this and do your Valiant husband the justice he deserves. Because, while heartfelt, this is not poetry. Most 'rankers will write 10 pieces, only one of which will be worth rewriting or posting. Get used to it. It's work.
Now now it wasn't nice of you to delete my comment like that. I mean, I'd just re-post it, but I can't because I don't remember: partly beccause your poem had a mental black-out effect similar to the pressure of a steel baseball bat when applied to the skull of a living person. O well.
is this a joke?
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I suppose you might have meant "my soldier divided by my husband," but if you divide a soldier by a husband, what is the result? A bit of body armor, testosterone, and barely-concealed homoerotic tendencies over 1, I imagine.