untitled: dedicated to my soldier/husband

Member since 2004 · Posted 13 May 2004 · Edited 14 May 2004 · 7 comments

sitting here tonight alone in bed a million things running through my head what i did or didnt say things i should have done that day oh how id pay to rewind time even for my last dime i wish for just one more moment, just us i get so angry i start to cry and so sad i start to cuse i believe in the fight that you fight i know you are only doing what is right i am honored to be your wife but sometimes the heartache custs like a knife i know you will come home from this war dont worry babe, ill be fighting the guards at the door!

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[10] zodiac 14-May-04/4:39 AM Reply

I read "my soldier/husband" as "my soldier and/or my husband". Am I to understand that you have your own soldier in addition to having a husband? How does that work, exactly? Is he an "Army of One"?

I suppose you might have meant "my soldier divided by my husband," but if you divide a soldier by a husband, what is the result? A bit of body armor, testosterone, and barely-concealed homoerotic tendencies over 1, I imagine.

[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 14-May-04/4:58 AM Reply

Thoughts (Free verse) by nicole081083

As I lie here in my bed
Many thoughts run through my head
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wait for sleep (Lyric) by xunitedx

i wait for sleep as i'm lying in my bed
but i can't stop these thoughts from running through my head
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Insomnia (Pimple) by BiggRobb

Every night that I lay down to bed,
I'm constantly bombarded with thoughts racing through my head;
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Adam's Apple (Lyric) by hotwire

Not enough words rush through my head
as I laid spend there in my bed
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Falling in Love (Free verse) by disturbedone182

I lie awake for hours upon my bed
While thoughts of her race through my head
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untitled: dedicated to my soldier/husband (Free verse) by SweetJuliet10

sitting here tonight alone in bed
a million things running through my head

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[10] edpeterson 14-May-04/5:48 AM Reply

very funny this one. Untitled, followed by a title.
if i had not read this, i would not believe that it could be written.

[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › edpeterson 14-May-04/6:58 AM Reply

http://www.guggenheim.org/exhibitions/singular_forms/highlights_13a.html

[4] INTRANSIT 14-May-04/6:14 AM Reply

I'M GOING TO THROW YOU A LIFE PRESERVER!!! PUT IT ON!!!

Buy a copy of : Poetry for dummies. No, I'm not kidding. and some poetry to read. rummage through the section at the library for something you like. read. practice. Then rewrite this and do your Valiant husband the justice he deserves. Because, while heartfelt, this is not poetry. Most 'rankers will write 10 pieces, only one of which will be worth rewriting or posting. Get used to it. It's work.

[6] Sasha 14-May-04/3:32 PM Reply

Now now it wasn't nice of you to delete my comment like that. I mean, I'd just re-post it, but I can't because I don't remember: partly beccause your poem had a mental black-out effect similar to the pressure of a steel baseball bat when applied to the skull of a living person. O well.

[0] killingjuliet 31-May-04/9:58 PM Reply

is this a joke?