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untitled: dedicated to my soldier/husband (Free verse) by SweetJuliet10

sitting here tonight alone in bed a million things running through my head what i did or didnt say things i should have done that day oh how id pay to rewind time even for my last dime i wish for just one more moment, just us i get so angry i start to cry and so sad i start to cuse i believe in the fight that you fight i know you are only doing what is right i am honored to be your wife but sometimes the heartache custs like a knife i know you will come home from this war dont worry babe, ill be fighting the guards at the door!

INTRANSIT 14-May-04/6:14 AM
I'M GOING TO THROW YOU A LIFE PRESERVER!!! PUT IT ON!!!

Buy a copy of : Poetry for dummies. No, I'm not kidding. and some poetry to read. rummage through the section at the library for something you like. read. practice. Then rewrite this and do your Valiant husband the justice he deserves. Because, while heartfelt, this is not poetry. Most 'rankers will write 10 pieces, only one of which will be worth rewriting or posting. Get used to it. It's work.




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