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Oomphless

Member since 2002 · Posted 16 May 2004 · 4 comments

The Passion drifts away I become meaningless I was naive But I beleived my own lies. I know better now, but the passion is gone. No more oomph.

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[10] INTRANSIT 16-May-04/6:31 PM Reply

Drop the last line.

[9] Sasha 16-May-04/7:04 PM Reply

Nono

Drop all of the last line except the first and last word. Then capitalize the last word

[10] Bobjim 17-May-04/4:58 AM Reply

WHAT!!! No more oomph. I pity you, have a 10 as consolation.

[8] Signature 21-May-04/3:21 AM Reply

I would add a,'still' after "is" in the 2nd to last line and then make it the last line. But well done