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Oomphless (Free verse) by shwenatjadeflower

The Passion drifts away I become meaningless I was naive But I beleived my own lies. I know better now, but the passion is gone. No more oomph.

Signature 21-May-04/3:21 AM
I would add a,'still' after "is" in the 2nd to last line and then make it the last line. But well done




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