on A life unsure by sliver
8 Jun 2004, 5:55 AM
Yes you're doing well with this piece. Set it aside for a couple days, then read it aloud and listen and mark the spots that bug you. 8 keep going.
on mutiny by Bill Z Bub
8 Jun 2004, 5:47 AM
I like it, therapy or not. good to see you again.
Not sure about being entwined in planks.
I flat out don't understand the therapy line. Don't change it yet. Imma thinkin'. Prelim 8
Not sure about being entwined in planks.
I flat out don't understand the therapy line. Don't change it yet. Imma thinkin'. Prelim 8
replying on Bitter bacardi makes the black stones dance. by SupremeDreamer
8 Jun 2004, 5:38 AM
Oh, it was yours. I'm sorry. I don't know what was wrong with your worm. As for the poem....
replying on Bitter bacardi makes the black stones dance. by SupremeDreamer
8 Jun 2004, 5:36 AM
Not malaysian that I know of. Yes it is a 50/50 response. I liked the other better. Probably because I'm a laggarding traditionalist of sorts. meh on me, ha!
replying on Hollywierd by INTRANSIT
7 Jun 2004, 8:23 PM
'sokay. I'm poetically challenged. Time heals all wounds, or some such hootenanny. I'll read 'em all tamale. My ocular locating lenses are parched.
replying on Hollywierd by INTRANSIT
7 Jun 2004, 8:19 PM
Thank you. I'm suprised you like it.
replying on Hollywierd by INTRANSIT
7 Jun 2004, 7:54 PM
Shake. Aim. Twist. Pop!
replying on Hollywierd by INTRANSIT
7 Jun 2004, 7:53 PM
Point me to one of your rants. I'm curious. 'Course no one rants like the Big Bad Ho Daddy.
on Carl Jung And the Flying Spiders by horus8
7 Jun 2004, 7:45 PM
Your highway was plenty wide, pinballish though. Too bad Jung was working the construction zone and you failed to slow. Poor Carl. 9. For drowning me.
on Bitter bacardi makes the black stones dance. by SupremeDreamer
7 Jun 2004, 7:34 PM
If you wrote the other one about the tequila worm, then, meh, is my feeling. If not, meh anyway.
Maybe try one about Goldschlager instead.
Goldschlager- Noun. What Goldmember has in his pants.
Maybe try one about Goldschlager instead.
Goldschlager- Noun. What Goldmember has in his pants.
on Writers' Block by wilco
7 Jun 2004, 7:15 PM
Classic simplicity.
on Le Sommeil- Slumber by Sasha
7 Jun 2004, 7:09 PM
I don't know french, but I'd say that since the french version end rhymes also, this took a few cups of espresso to complete.
replying on Decks of Cards (So Long to the City) by wilco
7 Jun 2004, 6:24 AM
I see my comment was too short. I meant I didn't want him to cancel himself out by what someone else said about his lyrics. You have it handled, carry on.
replying on Decks of Cards (So Long to the City) by wilco
6 Jun 2004, 7:54 PM
Don't do that to yourself.
replying on A life unsure by sliver
6 Jun 2004, 7:26 PM
A copy of poetry for dummies. what's the Norton Anthology? i might need it.
replying on Solipsistic, Drunk, But Still Friends by horus8
6 Jun 2004, 6:17 PM
I am well aware that Horus8 is quite surgical about his choices.
replying on Decks of Cards (So Long to the City) by wilco
6 Jun 2004, 2:12 PM
If this is the case, then why haven't the "perfect" people been able to rid the earth of those who are less than perfect.
on paperclips by son of the moon
6 Jun 2004, 7:27 AM
Lose the -little fuckers. and the parentheses marks.
I like it.
I like it.
on why I hate politics by edwardo
6 Jun 2004, 6:28 AM
Well Ed, I think you've got some of us piqued. I think this needs more. But that's me.