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Obituary for the Moon (Lyric) by wilco
Saw a flash outside my room thought it was lightning But it was just the moon. Exploding into dusty waves and watching as the universe dug its lonesome grave. Chorus: There was nothing I could do when the drugs stopped working. So I smoked another cigarette and wrote a letter to you. Were you watching silently when the light went away? At least we have the sun. Did it wake you from your sleep and force you to open up your life in time to live? (Bridge) I can remember sleeping with summer and climbing walls of sleep. Loving her like the end of a storm with pictures of cloudless skies. Chorus: There was nothing I could do when the drugs stopped working. So I smoked another cigarette and wrote an obituary for the moon.

Down the ladder: whilst the bells ring

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.8333335
Weighted score: 6.831663
Overall Rank: 345
Posted: May 6, 2004 4:29 PM PDT; Last modified: May 9, 2004 2:16 PM PDT
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Comments:
[0] poetandknowit @ 65.101.211.249 | 9-May-04/12:13 AM | Reply
Yes, barkeep I would like a gin and tonic water!!!!
[n/a] wilco @ 24.176.102.131 > poetandknowit | 9-May-04/9:07 AM | Reply
For future reference, you can just say 'gin and tonic'. Adding the water to the end just makes you sound like a pretentious asshole.
[n/a] cleverdevice @ 212.219.142.161 > wilco | 10-May-04/3:04 AM | Reply
And 'please' wouldn't go amiss either, we barmen appreciate good manners you know. Not that I am a barman, I'm just imagining what a barman might say. I actually work in an expensive cookware shop.
[n/a] Sisterwolf @ 207.69.139.9 > wilco | 23-Dec-05/1:44 PM | Reply
Is such harsh critic, and ignorant language helpful to the
poet?
[7] zodiac @ 70.109.2.131 > Sisterwolf | 24-Dec-05/9:38 AM | Reply
Is "Very unique voice here. Edgy and filled with imagery. Good stuff here" helpful to the poet?
[8] edpeterson @ 68.79.7.110 | 9-May-04/2:27 PM | Reply
Good song.
[9] Sasha @ 69.138.236.63 | 9-May-04/2:31 PM | Reply
Good song indeed. Unfortunately a song is not necessarily a poem, though it can be. This straddles the border between song and poem.
[n/a] wilco @ 24.176.102.131 > Sasha | 9-May-04/2:32 PM | Reply
Hence the little word "Lyric" next to the title.
[9] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.116.68 | 9-May-04/4:20 PM | Reply
Groovy. 'Rita, please. no salt.
[9] deleted user @ 68.66.196.168 | 9-May-04/5:17 PM | Reply
I don't see the bar scene as others do.
I tend to be blind to what others see.
I didn't see the moon "when the light went away."
I was too busy fighting, protecting my self
Putting off loving til "the end of a storm."
Crap, I say, to the poemranker storm.
Wish we all could just talk about poems.
Like this one, which I like quite a lot.

[n/a] wilco @ 24.176.102.131 > deleted user | 9-May-04/5:21 PM | Reply
Thanks, H. I'm not exactly sure where all this talk of liquor came from because this song doesn't mention it and it's not about the bar scene...but I do like bars and liquor quite a lot so I'll let it slide. ;0)
[10] Stephen Robins @ 213.146.148.199 | 10-May-04/1:20 AM | Reply
BLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEERRRRRRRRRHGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHH!

-10_
[n/a] wilco @ 24.176.102.131 | 10-May-04/12:46 PM | Reply
I wonder why hypatia changed her name to "Deleted User".....I liked the old name better....
[9] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 10-May-04/6:59 PM | Reply
That would work. yep, yes it would.
[n/a] wilco @ 24.176.102.131 > Shuushin | 10-May-04/7:10 PM | Reply
You know what? Sometimes I think that this weighted scoring system is some sloppy slaw. How do I get six 9s, an 8 and a 10 and I still only have a 6.08? Sloppy slaw indeed.
[9] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 > wilco | 10-May-04/7:20 PM | Reply
Boggles my mind but I think nentwined has a purty good handle on it, on the big picture.

It affects everyone the same, so - no worries.
[n/a] wilco @ 24.176.102.131 > Shuushin | 10-May-04/7:37 PM | Reply
Oh, somehow....it works to perfection. I just like saying sloppy slaw.
[10] sliver @ 63.189.16.228 | 6-Jun-04/7:55 PM | Reply
Sloppy what? Nothing I saw....10,10.
[10] sliver @ 63.190.81.28 | 16-Jun-04/7:59 PM | Reply
You know, I've read this quite a few times now, and I like the first two stanza's, but I lost it or you lost it when you started in on the chorus. Could you try to find what you had when you started this and continue it as more of a poem than a song?
[n/a] wilco @ 24.176.102.131 > sliver | 16-Jun-04/9:50 PM | Reply
I suppose I could, but this conveys the meaning that I want it to have (to me anyway). Its a song and is not really complete w/o the music. I feel that its good as is and don't feel the need to change it. Thanks for the comment though. It has to progress and I feel that it did. You must understand that the whole part about the moon exploding is drug induced in addition to metaphor. The rest is simply, as I said, progression as I see it.
[7] Mystictwilight @ 205.188.116.68 | 14-Sep-04/9:14 PM | Reply
I liked it...good jod
[10] dancin_n_da_moonlite @ 152.163.100.135 | 16-Jan-05/9:52 PM | Reply
wow.......blows my mind..........this is so ultimately excellent............10!!!!!!
-mega
[8] horus8 @ 24.130.62.63 | 2-Feb-05/6:53 PM | Reply
Are you Hewey Lewis?
[n/a] wilco @ 24.165.207.93 > horus8 | 2-Feb-05/7:02 PM | Reply
Nope, Kenny Loggins.
[n/a] Sisterwolf @ 207.69.139.9 | 23-Dec-05/1:41 PM | Reply
Very unique voice here. Edgy and filled with
imagery. Good stuff here.
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