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Free verse № 18345

whilst the bells ring

by richa

Member since 2002 · Posted 1 Oct 2002 · Edited 14 Aug 2003 · 10 comments

Plants doff their flowers Stalks speared to the sun Respecting the hours Church chimed three.. two... one... Ringing out brave In a tall chimney spire The bells cupboard caged Still drown out the choir The floorboards beneath Creak side to side Pine pressed a green Hinting a thyme Cursed under the shadow Of bells burned a bronze Whilst ropes hang a gallow And chimes ding a dong Sleep... sleep... sleep... The candlestick fields Reap.. reap.. reap The scythe of the bells

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A favorite of god'swife, INTRANSIT.

10 comments

[10] god'swife 1-Oct-02/11:26 AM Reply
Fuck yes! S4 is briliant. Simple. "The scythe of the bells" is unique and has a lovely sound. Please help loneshadow out. He's got the will but lacks only the tools. Lend him some of yours please. You are a fine craftsman.
[10] <~> 4-Oct-02/8:49 PM Reply
this is the best i have read of yours. i liked it very much. great, sharp rhythm, macbre imagery, mood, tone...
bravo.
[n/a] richa 14-Aug-03/7:11 AM Reply
an old one of mine, I just deleted the last verse and changed a single line for housekeeping purposes
[10] ecargo 14-Aug-03/8:00 AM Reply
Richa, this is lovely--very Emily Dickinson in its deceptive simplicity. Stalks spear the sun, maybe, to make it more active? Gallows, with the s, is the singular, btw.

One of my absolute favorites.
[10] Caducus 14-Aug-03/1:16 PM Reply
Your use of language and ability to illustrate so much with concise lines always makes me envy you. Not that it matters but heres your gold nugget --10
[10] INTRANSIT 15-Aug-03/6:20 AM Reply
Time to take your turn at the top. Brilliant.
[10] abecedarian 15-Aug-03/8:16 AM Reply
actually got chills at the last two lines... must be worth a 10
[n/a] Imago 30-Oct-04/1:19 AM Reply
Whilst ropes huh? Sounds a little archaic for common language
[n/a] Imago 30-Oct-04/1:31 AM Reply
It's all fine except the "ding a dong" part. Last time my dong was dinged it hurt like hell.
[1] Holy Tits 18-Jan-07/7:35 AM Reply
Are you fucking serious? This is truly awful. Childish trash. Oh dear.