poemranker ::epicentre by richa

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Free verse № 24778

epicentre

Member since 2002 · Posted 12 Nov 2002 · 6 comments

Perhaps the mood Has greyed A single tone darker Perhaps the dandelion clocks Now shine A single star brighter Perhaps the silver birch Now matches the scene A single day earlier Than else would have been Maybe the mood reaches, far A shadow cast collar Round a tree trunk no further It maybe coals only one canvas One face, one sky of six billion Moon wide like a plate It maybe lasts just one hour Between the calm And fierce weather Whilst the cracks are still fresh Whilst the cut roots still shine Where we lowered you in Was the morning indeed sadder? Or had it inverted the smoke From your burning pyre Did indeed the sky mourn For it had not lifted Or did the sky stall Slow with forgiveness

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6 comments

[7] Tintagiles 12-Nov-02/11:11 AM Reply
Jesa. You sound like Guillevic. That's a compliment, by the way.
[8] <~> 12-Nov-02/11:34 AM Reply
niiice. in a dark way.
[9] Caducus 13-Nov-02/5:39 AM Reply
love the opening 4 stanzas best, your work is nice to read and i will look out for more of your work. I have noticed by reading poems on this site that theirs a lot of zerohappy raters on some pretty good stuff, if you get anything below 5 their talking shit, give this a 9, nice one richa, good luck
[10] horus8 13-Nov-02/9:29 PM Reply
Androgynous and underhanded as is consistently predictable i'm convinced you're just another genius doing this left handed for the high laugh...here's something else to laugh about...an 9. i
[1] Garrett S Sexton 13-Apr-03/3:15 AM Reply
THIS TIME LAST YEAR,IT'S LIKELY YOU HADN'T HEARD OF GARETT S. BUT AFTER THIS ENGLISH STUDMUFFIN GOT HOT WITH THE WORLD IN A PHONE BOOTH,THE SCHUMACHERS TOOK NOTE

REMEMBERING STU SHEPARD.I PICKED UP THAT RINGING PAYPHONE,THE CALLER TOLD ME THAT HE'S GOT A GUN TRAINED ON MY HEAD I'LL DIE IF ,I HANG UP.

PLAYED OUT IN REAL TIME .I HUNG UP AND FOR ME LIKE THIS POEM ,YOU KNOW
[10] INTRANSIT 6-Aug-03/7:26 AM Reply
I'm going to rifle through your files for a little while. Your average is very consistent. I find that fascinating for some reason. This is excellent btw.