Re: Ghosts by unknown^user	9-May-04/11:33 AM
Love the piece. Hate the commas.
Re: forwards by nentwined	8-May-04/1:23 PM
S-3 this greatening restricted. S-4 stop,period, Drop the solo line. These are my suggestions. Nice to see you in the 'hood.
Re: Vodka kisses & the final sigh, v.II (bloody vodka remix) by SupremeDreamer	8-May-04/1:13 PM
Better beat, verbage. Quite.
Re: a comment on clay or mud (hertz donut version) by nentwined	6-May-04/1:28 PM
very well, then.
Re: clay or mud (hertz donut version) by nentwined	6-May-04/1:20 PM
A. Where is the other version? Searched. Came up penniless. B. Are you regressing to high school with the donut thing. Good but not quite you, this time.
Re: Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone	6-May-04/7:01 AM
3 for length. 3 for humour. 2 for Max Headroom. 2 for Woostuh. -2 for the off beat stanzas. 1 for nuttyness.
Re: a comment on Everglades parkway by INTRANSIT	6-May-04/6:09 AM
imho? still not familiar with that one. sorry.
Re: a comment on Everglades parkway by INTRANSIT	6-May-04/6:08 AM
That's the wierd thing. The actual event happened in sort of slow motion so I went space crazy in the first. I loved it that way but something still didn't seem right. I can't argue with squiggles about the crit either though. This will be the second poem I have overanalyzed/overworked, which honestly pains me more than dropping it and moving on. im so cornfused.
Re: a comment on Everglades parkway by INTRANSIT	5-May-04/7:48 PM
Yes. And the old version is still up for comparison. Thanks for noticing. not icing. hmmm.
Re: a comment on Everglades parkway by INTRANSIT	5-May-04/7:45 PM
Great name!! It is rare that I get as far south as Brunswick or Fla. I think I shall take the name and remind myself to practice a little more story telling in the future. Thanks again. Might run into you some time. Not literally, of course.
Re: a comment on Everglades parkway by INTRANSIT	5-May-04/6:56 PM
"Melbourne to Brunswick" perhaps? Great Idea. I looked at the map. Lousy names.
Re: Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone	5-May-04/2:28 PM
I kept one 'cos I'm broke.
Re: a comment on Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone	5-May-04/2:27 PM
Here's one Fraser Allonby Board (of) Innumerable Offenses The F.A.B.I.O.
Re: The Towel Head Blues by horus8	5-May-04/2:19 PM
I thought it said Eric fucking Stoli....oooopsie.
Re: a comment on On the Discovery of High Noon and The Devil in a Glass Jar. by MacFrantic	5-May-04/2:17 PM
I'm sorry it wasn't you who wrote the frog thing. Just the name alone puts my asthma into overtime.
Re: When she beats me by Win	5-May-04/1:59 PM
needs a bit of a hint as to what woman we are dealing with here. mom? sis? girlfriend? other? It is worthy of the effort.
Re: a comment on Everglades parkway by INTRANSIT	5-May-04/1:55 PM
It will recieve a much better title. When I find one. (Rummaging through fat backs' bin) Nope. not here.
Re: a comment on Working at the Garden Market by jessicazee	5-May-04/5:41 AM
Normally, I'm not that lazy. Thanks.
Re: Working at the Garden Market by jessicazee	4-May-04/5:45 PM
impatiens?
Re: Vodka kisses & the final sigh. by SupremeDreamer	4-May-04/2:30 PM
Yes. Small nits. Stogies-dump'em. Cigar even works better. Lose (quite) add comma. The bloody morning-suggesting a bloody mary, excellent. Over all 01.