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Vodka kisses & the final sigh, v.II (bloody vodka remix) (Villanelle) by SupremeDreamer Scarlet burnt sky & vodka kisses goodbye;
really was nice talkin 'n smokin,
till our last weary mumbles & the final sigh.
Fatigue our bodies can not try to deny;
it's bitter 'n grim, just like sin
served stiff, with vodka kisses goodbye.
Our glasses are full, yet lips remain dry--
This bleedin red sky keeps burnin
till our last mumbles, & final jaded sigh.
Time passes, our cigars burn & slowly die;
cool blue smoke starts witherin--
our hip mood swiftly vodka kiss'd goodbye.
Rosy-red brow saggin, smiling, mad & sly.
Killed the last warm shot of gin,
before our weary mumbling & the final sigh.
Rubbin my sore-achin 'n crusted left eye,
as my ole belly starts a-blazin
from devil sky & stiff vodka kiss goodbye--
bloody mary stirrin my last wry & tired sigh.
Up the ladder:
Skull Soup v.2
Down the ladder:
Hard Rock
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Posted: March 6, 2004 1:03 AM PST; Last modified: May 8, 2004 9:51 AM PDTWeighted score: 6.3333335 Overall Rank: 852 Comments:
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 163.1.146.225
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8-May-04/10:24 AM
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Wipe that stupid smile off your bum-like face, hand your badge back to the commissioner, get the hell out of my office, and for Christ's sake put some clothes on :( -10-
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Don-Quixote @ 204.31.170.100
> -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
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8-May-04/12:25 PM
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Whatever.
Better beat, verbage. Quite.
cannot (one word) unless you think it is more "poetic" to keep them separated- I really do not think it is, I believe it just detracts from the flow.
bleedin' red...witherin'-saggin'-stirrin' ... 346 view(s)
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