| Re: Gothic by zodiac |
4-May-04/7:11 AM |
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I disagree. There is a poem in there. What you need is a well trained Ferret. As you know, I am not said Ferret. Put it back in the english wheel.
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| Re: The Influence of Anxiety by Nicholas Jones |
4-May-04/6:52 AM |
I'll get back to you. In a hunnert or so years.
Poem or not, it is a vehicle to get from your last writ to your next. Most important.
Bloomsday? Hmmmm..
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| Re: Natural Remedy by richa |
3-May-04/5:47 PM |
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"grow tall and tall..." maybe. It's a Whitman thing. I dunno. I like it as is. I tend to overlook burned leaves if the root is strong.
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| Re: Loss by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
2-May-04/5:35 PM |
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You swim so fluidly through the murky waters of your past. My past, not so murky, not clear either.
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| Re: the beale street mud festival. by wilco |
2-May-04/5:29 PM |
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(Journey) Ha! What beautiful irony.
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| Re: It's True by jessicazee |
1-May-04/7:55 AM |
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On a humorical note, it's funny. The earnestness however, suggests a health issue. I'm confused.
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| Re: Air by Bachus |
30-Apr-04/4:20 PM |
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| Re: The Politics of Poetry.coms by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
16-Mar-04/3:46 PM |
Sadly, my epiphanys come in single penny doses. My most recent,-as long as you follow, he will lead you anywhere he damn well pleases,- came as a two-center.
You have been blessed. Enjoy.
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| Re: Brethren by richa |
16-Mar-04/5:12 AM |
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Why it is that good stuff like this gets overlooked, I'll nevr know.
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| Re: Allpoetry.com is to poetry what Asshats are to poetry by Shardik |
16-Mar-04/5:05 AM |
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yes, yes. Give 'em a good Knawk Knawk.
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| Re: My Day Off by wilco |
16-Mar-04/4:47 AM |
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Simple theme, simple rhyme. I like it, anyway
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| Re: My Boyfriend's Afro Pick by horus8 |
14-Mar-04/3:10 PM |
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Just how much Ginsberg have you read?
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| Re: Lullaby by Goad |
14-Mar-04/2:25 PM |
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as the last to comment, I missed the tweaks and read at least three times before I had anything to say. obviously, I still don't. filling in the blank -9-.
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| Re: Blinking by zodiac |
14-Mar-04/1:59 PM |
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ready sounds better. I still get fearlessness.
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| Re: a comment on Blinking by zodiac |
14-Mar-04/1:21 PM |
Remembering the fearlessness of youth. I just don't understand the shock value of the cock here. Skinny dipping maybe??? I dunno.
pots right, cards a comin'.
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| Re: Blinking by zodiac |
14-Mar-04/1:16 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT |
13-Mar-04/3:16 PM |
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Thanks, Shuushin. I wasn't feeling very open that day. My apologies.
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| Re: a comment on Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT |
13-Mar-04/3:13 PM |
Yes. I read not too long ago, that part of free verse is carrying the pace through the poem. Did I slow it correctly?
As far as the "kid gloves" are concerned, you don't need them, however, "heavy handing" doesn't work. Not that you intended that originally. I am oversensitive at times, too. One request? No rewriting in the future, please. It feels like you're doing the work FOR me. Just a bump in the right direction and a reason, and I'm good to go.
Thank you immensly, Captain Zodiac
INTRANSIT
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| Re: Eris, my blade, the accurst villanelle by SupremeDreamer |
13-Mar-04/12:02 PM |
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Much better than my first attempt at a villanelle was. Funnier too. Shrill knell. too good.lol.
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| Re: Eris, my blade, the accurst villanelle by SupremeDreamer |
13-Mar-04/11:50 AM |
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ok. at this point I'm more worried about your health than your poetry.
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