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Air (Ghazal) by Bachus
Invisible shifts, and currents from earth to void I've toyed around with no better co-dependent. Than you, and the way you hug your egg Keeping your waters blue, deep and saltier still. Tornadoes between cloud and sharp prairie dog bark; In this wide open expanse, all will blow away. Direction-less-everywhere, keeper of the spectrum Filtering the espy of stars from burning us to dust. Gardens of green cells dividing, seeding, dying in exchanges of energy too simple to see by eye. Two way mirror, semi permeable womb, osmosis, I've - - taken you for granted, because I've become used to you. All around me, inside of me, modestly carrying me along breath by breath, storm by storm, sigh by sigh.


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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0666666
Weighted score: 5.0587196
Overall Rank: 6792
Posted: April 30, 2004 3:15 PM PDT; Last modified: April 30, 2004 3:15 PM PDT
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[8] deleted user @ 68.66.196.168 | 30-Apr-04/4:01 PM | Reply
I relate to most of this, which is to say it seems like Air and some things air might represent. But prairie dogs don't bark, and how does air hug it's egg? The last verse is great.
[n/a] Bachus @ 66.229.187.185 > deleted user | 30-Apr-04/10:13 PM | Reply
Great to you, because it's the worst to me, keep that in mind.
[10] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.116.68 | 30-Apr-04/4:20 PM | Reply
As always.
[0] deleted user @ 172.145.75.64 | 17-Sep-04/6:58 PM | Reply
Shit by shit.
[0] klosterfobik @ 205.188.116.140 | 19-Sep-04/4:29 PM | Reply
shit
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