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Ghazal № 99712

Air

Member since 2002 · Posted 30 Apr 2004 · 5 comments

Invisible shifts, and currents from earth to void I've toyed around with no better co-dependent. Than you, and the way you hug your egg Keeping your waters blue, deep and saltier still. Tornadoes between cloud and sharp prairie dog bark; In this wide open expanse, all will blow away. Direction-less-everywhere, keeper of the spectrum Filtering the espy of stars from burning us to dust. Gardens of green cells dividing, seeding, dying in exchanges of energy too simple to see by eye. Two way mirror, semi permeable womb, osmosis, I've - - taken you for granted, because I've become used to you. All around me, inside of me, modestly carrying me along breath by breath, storm by storm, sigh by sigh.

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[8] deleted user 30-Apr-04/4:01 PM Reply
I relate to most of this, which is to say it seems like Air and some things air might represent. But prairie dogs don't bark, and how does air hug it's egg? The last verse is great.
[n/a] Bachus › deleted user 30-Apr-04/10:13 PM Reply
Great to you, because it's the worst to me, keep that in mind.
[10] INTRANSIT 30-Apr-04/4:20 PM Reply
As always.
[0] deleted user 17-Sep-04/6:58 PM Reply
Shit by shit.
[0] klosterfobik 19-Sep-04/4:29 PM Reply
shit