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Free verse № 1501

i wake up from a dream of my mouth

by silvertongueddevil

Member since 2002 · Posted 11 May 2002 · 3 comments

i wake up from a dream of my mouth open over your soft breast. it is 3 am and i have lost you in the tangled sheets of my bed. i search for you. i search for you until i really wake up, naked on the landing, looking down the stairs. i remember i didn't lose you in my bed, i lost you in the park on the corner, seated on a bench at its edge.

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[5] Roisin 20-Jul-02/4:04 AM Reply
Very nice. Sincere feelings of longing are conveyed. You could probably take this one further and make it more but it is good in it's own right.
[8] -=SeTTle=- 1-Aug-02/5:25 PM Reply
Try writing a POEM about it. Kidding. Good work.
[7] LuV_jOhNnY 7-Jan-04/1:48 PM Reply
Very sexual but has a wicked awesome twist at the end