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i wake up from a dream of my mouth (Free verse) by silvertongueddevil i wake up from a dream of my mouth
open over your soft breast.
it is 3 am and i have lost you
in the tangled sheets of my bed.
i search for you. i search for you until
i really wake up, naked on the landing,
looking down the stairs.
i remember i didn't lose you in my bed,
i lost you in the park on the corner,
seated on a bench at its edge.
Up the ladder:
Air
Down the ladder:
Swimming
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Posted: May 11, 2002 3:25 AM PDT; Last modified: May 11, 2002 3:25 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.0562353 Overall Rank: 6793 Comments:
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Roisin @ 80.225.8.45
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20-Jul-02/4:04 AM
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Very nice. Sincere feelings of longing are conveyed. You could probably take this one further and make it more but it is good in it's own right.
Try writing a POEM about it. Kidding. Good work.
Very sexual but has a wicked awesome twist at the end
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