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i wake up from a dream of my mouth (Free verse) by silvertongueddevil

i wake up from a dream of my mouth open over your soft breast. it is 3 am and i have lost you in the tangled sheets of my bed. i search for you. i search for you until i really wake up, naked on the landing, looking down the stairs. i remember i didn't lose you in my bed, i lost you in the park on the corner, seated on a bench at its edge.

Roisin 20-Jul-02/4:04 AM
Very nice. Sincere feelings of longing are conveyed. You could probably take this one further and make it more but it is good in it's own right.




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