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Air (Ghazal) by Bachus

Invisible shifts, and currents from earth to void I've toyed around with no better co-dependent. Than you, and the way you hug your egg Keeping your waters blue, deep and saltier still. Tornadoes between cloud and sharp prairie dog bark; In this wide open expanse, all will blow away. Direction-less-everywhere, keeper of the spectrum Filtering the espy of stars from burning us to dust. Gardens of green cells dividing, seeding, dying in exchanges of energy too simple to see by eye. Two way mirror, semi permeable womb, osmosis, I've - - taken you for granted, because I've become used to you. All around me, inside of me, modestly carrying me along breath by breath, storm by storm, sigh by sigh.

hypatia 30-Apr-04/4:01 PM
I relate to most of this, which is to say it seems like Air and some things air might represent. But prairie dogs don't bark, and how does air hug it's egg? The last verse is great.




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