| Re: Get it straight by tre |
28-May-04/2:36 PM |
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zappa, monster guitarist....not poet. this is okay
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| Re: Child of Troy by Caducus |
27-May-04/10:26 AM |
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| Re: Child of Troy by Caducus |
27-May-04/10:25 AM |
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in to ...this separation bothers me...but overall this is a really good poem.
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| Re: Suicide of the Ego by Drifting Shadow |
26-May-04/5:47 AM |
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| Re: and you by edwardo |
25-May-04/5:27 AM |
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| Re: Oh No! by foothangingoutofass |
23-May-04/1:34 PM |
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by far the best poem i have read on this site. -0-
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| Re: I miss my gummibear. by Freethinker1602 |
19-May-04/3:47 PM |
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oi vey. whelp, here is a spin>>>>>>1 sorry, i cannot control the arbitrary nature of the spin.
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| Re: done than said by francis nor capule |
19-May-04/9:40 AM |
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I don't like the last stanza. up until then, i had 10.
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| Re: LOVE-ABOVE LISTE by Everyone |
18-May-04/10:11 AM |
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best poem i ever read, and every line rhymes with every other line. brilliant.
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| Re: On the Discovery of the Hated Tree and Another T.V. Dinner by MacFrantic |
17-May-04/9:25 AM |
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I think we treeists...fucking hilarious -0-
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| Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w |
14-May-04/1:36 PM |
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best poem i ever read -0-
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| Re: feelings of the inside by SweetJuliet10 |
14-May-04/5:52 AM |
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take some tylenol, then take a class in English Fundamentals.
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| Re: Tasha:dedicated to my dear friend by SweetJuliet10 |
14-May-04/5:50 AM |
furious with god...always have memories....
really special. best poem i have read in a long time. -0-
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| Re: untitled: dedicated to my soldier/husband by SweetJuliet10 |
14-May-04/5:48 AM |
very funny this one. Untitled, followed by a title.
if i had not read this, i would not believe that it could be written.
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| Re: THE BEST POEM EVER!!!!!! by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
13-May-04/6:12 AM |
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best poem i ever read. I wouldnt change a thing...0
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| Re: EGG by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
13-May-04/6:05 AM |
I think it becomes a little redundant, oblong as it were toward the end. I like the first stanza. But from there is seems to drag a little. the ending is powerful but it feels a trifle long.
i would take an e or 2 out of the final line, and perhaps add a bit more repetition to the middle.
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| Re: FINGER PIE by titan69 |
12-May-04/3:04 PM |
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that is the smelliest poem ever written. 10
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| Re: As You Are by MacFrantic |
12-May-04/8:05 AM |
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that is quite ambitious, and i think you pulled it off reasonably well.
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| Re: Highschool in My Head by MacFrantic |
12-May-04/7:07 AM |
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| Re: Obituary for the Moon by wilco |
9-May-04/2:27 PM |
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