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10-Feb-06/1:23 PM |
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It's got promise, and for most people, I'd probably give it an 8, but I've come to expect more from you. I imagine that you'll work it out.
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| Re: writer's block by Zoetrope |
10-Feb-06/1:26 PM |
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very nice..at first I was put off by the length (I have a short attention span), but you pulled it off nicely.
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| Re: a waste of time by hendrimike |
13-Feb-06/12:47 PM |
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Doesn't really say much as a whole that couldn't have been said in one verse. Mybe that's the point...hey, it's a mainstream pop song!
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| Re: Unless Redux by rahson_s |
13-Feb-06/12:50 PM |
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I've seen you do better, but not bad. I think, though, if you're going to throw out the racial slurs, just go ahead and say niggers. "Niggas" makes it seem like you're trying to skirt the issue and use slang instead.
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| Re: Panic Slide by MacFrantic |
13-Feb-06/12:57 PM |
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I'd like to see this formed into a more cohesive...um..thing..
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| Re: Valentine by zodiac |
13-Feb-06/1:04 PM |
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You're Carl newman from the New Pornographers aren't you..
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| Re: Conflict Resolution by Dovina |
20-Feb-06/1:29 PM |
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I really like this one. The third stanza is perfect, but I don't like the garage door.
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| Re: Louwanda by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
19-Mar-06/1:11 AM |
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| Re: Mid-July by Ranger |
19-Mar-06/1:20 AM |
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I likes..you shall have a 9.
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| Re: Looking Back by x0lovelylarnx0 |
19-Mar-06/1:25 AM |
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Some good sentiments, but just not a very...ummm..daring? poem..just not too inventive...could be worked on and turned into something though.
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| Re: Indiscrete by ecargo |
19-Mar-06/1:33 AM |
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| Re: Martijn by Chasz Misleading |
19-Mar-06/1:36 AM |
I think you misspelled Martin's name.
Seriously, though folks. I think if you want to poast this for others to read, maybe shorten it and make it a little more interesting. Otherwise just give it to Martijn.
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| Re: Judged by Dovina |
19-Mar-06/1:40 AM |
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| Re: One Too Many by ElmoBeavisButthead |
21-Mar-06/7:35 PM |
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I don't really think I can give you any better advice than Ranger already has. Follow his lead.
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| Re: Muff by Stephen Robins |
21-Mar-06/7:39 PM |
"I swear I saw an ewok, Grinning between your legs," is the funniest thing I've ever heard. 8 - just for that.
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| Re: Life Is Like A Rose by x0lovelylarnx0 |
21-Mar-06/7:42 PM |
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Good thoughts, but it's all been said before and in a much better way. Try looking for new ways to express your thoughts. Instead of just letting it flow onto the page, think about the line and think how you can say it in a different way.
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| Re: The Right Call by Dovina |
21-Mar-06/7:44 PM |
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| Re: You can go no further. by Dovina |
11-May-06/4:01 PM |
What's this about the demise of the Ranker? I know I've been away, but that's no reason to close up shop ;)
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22-May-06/8:21 PM |
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I suppose I should use your own voting system against you old-timer, but I just don't see the point. I suuppose the newbies will do that when you 0 all their poems. So, instead, I'm gonna give you a 7. Happy trails.
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| Re: Godproof Hat by Dovina |
22-May-06/8:24 PM |
I wish I had a God-proof hat. I always feel like He's watching me. Nice limerick.
On an unrelated topic, I'm ure glad I came back in time to see the return of Rockmage.
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