| Re: Lost Identity by TLRufener |
16-Dec-05/3:32 PM |
I don't kow if this qualifies as a leaving rant...
I'm trying to figure out what this is all about..you sound as if you think that the users of Poemranker have forced you to alter your writing to a point where you don't enjoy doing it anymore..If thats the way you feel, then I'm not sure hoe it happened.
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| Re: I love to see the sunrise by amanda_dcosta |
16-Dec-05/3:37 PM |
The 2nd line of the second stanza and the 4th line of the third read a little awkwardly. It's simple and you could probably beef it up with a little imagery.
Your thoughts are good, but the thing about poetry is that youu need to find an interesting new way to say it. For example, in the first stanza, instead of just tellign us you love the sunrise because each day is exciting and new, tell us why...
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| Re: Privacy by Dovina |
16-Dec-05/3:40 PM |
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I'm delighted that this isn't about religion...I do wish that you use a little punctuation...It just makes it easier to read, y'know.
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| Re: Partying Blind by poetry/poem101 |
9-Feb-06/3:11 PM |
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Well, I got through the first paragraph, but it's my feeling that if you want me to do you the courtesy of reading the whole thing and commenting and voting in a serious manner, the least you could do is run it through the spell checker.
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9-Feb-06/3:14 PM |
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It's a little simplistic for what I'm into right now...doesn't really leave anything to the imagination. Not that it's bad...it just doesn't really peak my interest.
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| Re: The Acorn Daisies by MacFrantic |
9-Feb-06/3:16 PM |
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| Re: Monkey Tree (Breathless edit) by ecargo |
9-Feb-06/3:20 PM |
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not bad, but the spacing is distracting and makes it harder to read than it should be.
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| Re: run'em'hard by grendal |
9-Feb-06/3:24 PM |
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It's like a retarded Dr. Seuss poem...no offense to you...It just doesn't make any sense.
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| Re: Unless by rahson_s |
9-Feb-06/3:39 PM |
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Some nice sentiments, but not a very entertaining read unless you're the one at which it's directed.
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9-Feb-06/3:54 PM |
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| Re: Pastry by Tirapasteles |
9-Feb-06/3:59 PM |
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no can reada so no can vota
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| Re: Moonlight Paradox by Glasseyez |
9-Feb-06/4:02 PM |
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| Re: cryogenicide necrobot by baphomet |
9-Feb-06/4:05 PM |
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That's a lot of words to not be making any sense. I'm hnestly not sure if you're making up words or misspelling them,. but either ay, changing that would yield, I believe, a much better poem.
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| Re: The Perigenetic Prayer by ALChemy |
9-Feb-06/4:09 PM |
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After reading the comments here and on a few other pages, I've realized that when you leave for a while and then come back..you have no clue whats going on anymore...nice poem by the way..Tommy likee
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
9-Feb-06/4:13 PM |
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A couple of tweaks and this will probably be a favorite..I'm not going to even try to give you a critique on where to tweak...you know.
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| Re: Memoirs of a miners son by Caducus |
9-Feb-06/4:18 PM |
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I hate to keep heaping praise upon you because I'm sure your head is swelling as I write this, but I can't help it. I'l give it a 10 if you can make it longer and it's still this good.
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| Re: Faith on a cross by Caducus |
9-Feb-06/4:20 PM |
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Not as good as the one i just read...but not bad.
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| Re: Lonely Road by drnick |
9-Feb-06/4:25 PM |
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It just doesn't really do anything for me...it's not really bad and I wish I knew what to tell you to improve it...just feels tired...
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| Re: Tonight (edit) by drnick |
9-Feb-06/4:30 PM |
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again, some cliches...and I think one thing that might hlp you is to get an idea of what you want to write..then work on how you want to say it..as opposed to letting the rhymes drive the poem as was said above.
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| Re: The Struggling Poet's Lament by Ranger |
10-Feb-06/1:20 PM |
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