| Re: Kiss of a rose by backstreetdreamer |
12-Feb-05/7:35 PM |
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Why not just call it "The Name of the Rose" *5*
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| Re: My Angel by jroday |
12-Feb-05/7:38 PM |
Interesting venture.
The structure could use some work.
*6*
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| Re: Orion takes aim by oneglove |
12-Feb-05/7:39 PM |
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Oh, please get rid of L4. *7*
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| Re: CUPID by al-naafiysh |
12-Feb-05/7:42 PM |
Man, that was such an entertaining poem! Little changes here and there-I won't be specific- and it's perfect! *10*
Can you put a single stanza in your "favorites" section?
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| Re: Prayer of Forgiveness by Dovina |
12-Feb-05/7:45 PM |
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definitely needs a line that stands out. *7*
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12-Feb-05/7:46 PM |
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| Re: Bridesmaids in the Rain by wilco |
12-Feb-05/8:25 PM |
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so good, very nice picture. *9*
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| Re: Starless by MacFrantic |
13-Feb-05/9:45 AM |
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There really should be more werewolf poems.
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| Re: broken pieces of a candy heart by brazen |
13-Feb-05/9:47 AM |
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Wow, single stanzas are ruling write now. In this, it happens to be the last. *7*
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| Re: Insanity by Lifeboatman |
13-Feb-05/9:48 AM |
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| Re: Plastic Explosive Iraqi-Man by Enkidu |
13-Feb-05/9:52 AM |
Ah, middle-eastern inspiration. I can't believe people failed to get this.
-Enkidu
-D. $ Fontera
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| Re: The Man I Love by Dovina |
13-Feb-05/9:01 PM |
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| Re: The Critical and His Horse by MacFrantic |
19-Feb-05/12:31 AM |
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| Re: Dustin(Incomplete) by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
19-Feb-05/9:41 AM |
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Hey! That name is my own, without the whole (incomplete) deal.
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| Re: ...on the Benefits of Being Ugly by Goad |
5-Mar-05/8:59 PM |
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| Re: Fat girls Who Wear Short Skirts During Winter Quarter by DurtKL |
8-Mar-05/9:20 PM |
RION12
Q.If these "bitches" don't know anything about you,
nor do you care about them, nor do they have the
irrelevant ability to do things that you can do,
nor can they say shit to you, and you care more
about their ability to perform oral sex on a man
than the poem itself, then why comment?
A. you're a douchebag, and this poem is very
original and very good.
*10*
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| Re: Memories by RION12 |
8-Mar-05/9:25 PM |
What memories?
Peeing in the kiddie pool while everyone was watching?
Or was it the episode of 7th heaven that changed your life?
Grow up and learn to use grammar correctly.
*4*
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| Re: Lesson in Wickedness by eyrbare |
8-Mar-05/9:53 PM |
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| Re: After He Left by Dovina |
2-Aug-05/10:44 AM |
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One of the best ending stanzas I have ever read, but the first one could use a bit of work. It makes sense, but the change in tenses and the last line-in the first stanza-is a bit grey. *9*
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| Re: Interstellar Planetary Escape Plan by drnick |
2-Aug-05/10:47 AM |
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It would be more intriguing if it wasn't written like it just came out of "Where the Sidewalk Ends". *7*
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