| Re: Forgiveness by Niphredil |
2-Aug-05/10:49 AM |
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Very good! I loved "before your blood congeals into hate". Could've done without the misplaced last line. *9*
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| Re: SO LONG MY BELOVED by prettyktm |
2-Aug-05/10:54 AM |
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Not too many soldiers pussy out like this, and please don't just repeat in the last stanza what you said in the first stanza. I know it's free verse, but the structuring is pitiful. *4*
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| Re: Floss by jauser |
2-Aug-05/10:57 AM |
How old are you? Are you expecting positive feedback with this load? Just use the word "fuck", nobody holds it against you. What we do hold against you is your poor spelling, rudimentary grammar, and total lack of poetic understanding. "Tragedic"? COME ON! *2*
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| Re: Wars Between Held Breath's by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
2-Aug-05/10:59 AM |
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Better englsih translation and you've got a solid bedtime story here. *7*
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| Re: Wars Between Held Breath's by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
2-Aug-05/11:00 AM |
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| Re: HOW IT USUALLY ENDS! by pennymarie |
2-Aug-05/11:01 AM |
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The first stanza ruined it for me, sorry. *6*
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| Re: writers block by Jesus' Pedometer |
2-Aug-05/11:03 AM |
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Ha! Always an uphill...what's the word? Darn it! *9*
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| Re: Mandrakes by Caducus |
2-Aug-05/11:05 AM |
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Strange...yet handy as an all-purpose stain remover and weather-resistant wood finish. *8*
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| Re: Life is not serious by daggatolar |
2-Aug-05/11:07 AM |
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| Re: untitled by AaronJKeating |
2-Aug-05/11:08 AM |
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Glorious imagery. Just great. Loved it all the way. *10*
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| Re: Potato hail by T. Jonathron Remp |
2-Aug-05/1:32 PM |
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Absurd! Wonderfully Potato! Superb poem without the potatoing as well! *10*
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| Re: War by zodiac |
3-Aug-05/2:57 PM |
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The title is strategically bland and I love the broken sentence structure. Always a fan of form. *10*
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| Re: Yield by wilco |
29-Sep-05/9:47 PM |
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Absolutely stunning poetry! Picked up steam and ended perfectly. No need to be sung. *10* *10* *10*
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| Re: Reckoning by <~> |
10-Jan-06/1:32 PM |
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Second stanza is particularly brilliant, as are the others. Remarkable. *10*
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| Re: Pain, I Curse Thee by woodstock20000 |
17-Jan-06/10:49 PM |
I don't know why, but I like this.P-e-rish *7*
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| Re: Spinning, reeling by ecargo |
17-Jan-06/10:51 PM |
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Hah, this is pretty damn good, and I don't care at all about what you have to say. *9*
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17-Jan-06/10:54 PM |
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Didn't like how it ended much, but great, nonetheless. *9*
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17-Jan-06/10:56 PM |
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| Re: My Reason by PoeticXTC |
17-Jan-06/10:57 PM |
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This could have been much better, still, *7*
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| Re: Jailbird by zodiac |
17-Jan-06/11:00 PM |
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Oh, if only I could express how great this truly is. *11*
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