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My Reason (Free verse) by PoeticXTC I left you.
I left him
standing there
Watching me
Leave.
I left him.
I left you
Wondering why.
Why I left you standing in owe.
Figure It Out!
It's all a game
A game I'm through Playing.
I've grown up and through praying
That you'd come to realize
the distance is Killing me,
Softly killing me,
quietly killing my love for you.
The passing time is colding my heart
And my will to hold on.
The thousand miles
between us
Has blinded you,
And convinced me to
Move on.
This is my reason
Why
I left you.
I left him
Watching me leave.
Up the ladder:
no rashes
Down the ladder:
Crystal Lane Swift
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Posted: January 13, 2006 8:29 PM PST; Last modified: January 17, 2006 7:48 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.0 Overall Rank: 7776 Comments:
This could have been much better, still, *7*
A bit of an odd piece. Seems like love has been a disappointment, and that you are either angry at yourself or with him. Maybe it could have been more clearer.
its both.
I'm mad at him for the things he's done and mad at myself for puttin up with it.
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Creating or representing emotion in writing usually has very little to do with yelling and emphasis. Drop the caps. Add some emotion.