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Reckoning

by <~>

Member since 2002 · Posted 9 Jan 2006 · 12 comments

With an abacus, I could track the times you and I have weighed in, hand to hand, skull to skull, mouth to mouth, beaded with sweat. If I had the brass, I'd quit you and your pheromone juju that undoes my knees every time I see you. Given the grit, I'd gash you when you take a stab at me. But I have ifs and you have me, netted, complicit, wooden and pushed about like some counter, adding up to us.

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[10] INTRANSIT 9-Jan-06/9:39 AM Reply
Serious juju. Sorry, I'm still from the Rothian camp. Do you just like to play with little balls? I'll stop now. Gotta visit the loo. I'll check back with scrawl a little later. Brain is cooking today. Hope I can post my newest "over there". Thanks fo' da hep!
[n/a] <~> › INTRANSIT 9-Jan-06/9:40 AM Reply
you gotta post in the welcome forum to get let in, rich...
[9] zodiac 9-Jan-06/3:24 PM Reply
"netted, complicit, wooden and pushed about" is great. The rest of the last stanza should go, says me.
[9] ALChemy 9-Jan-06/4:16 PM Reply
Has a groovy beat poem feel to it. It was pleasant to read but nothing much really stuck with me except the lines Zodiac already mentioned.
[7] Dovina 9-Jan-06/7:07 PM Reply
"I have ifs, and you have me," What a way to live. Yet it's too often true.
[9] Shuushin 9-Jan-06/7:36 PM Reply
Lovely, tastey words prettily played.
[10] http://mulberryfairy 9-Jan-06/7:40 PM Reply
powerful and real- I'm totally believing it.
I like the lightness and how you play it with the
reality that it is serious and painful, too.
[9] lmp 10-Jan-06/7:47 AM Reply
could it be a crush? more likely a power struggle... dont have much time now, but will think on it.
i can feel the frustration and anger, yet those emotions are delivered with the delicateness of one who is as you have written in the last verse.
nicely done.
[10] INTRANSIT 10-Jan-06/7:52 AM Reply
'Mornin. be over in a minute and I'm bringing something for one of the short story forums.
[10] MacFrantic 10-Jan-06/1:32 PM Reply
Second stanza is particularly brilliant, as are the others. Remarkable. *10*
[8] amanda_dcosta 16-Jan-06/9:54 AM Reply
Good work! Keep it up.
[8] Ranger 29-Jan-06/6:23 AM Reply
I'm sure there's something intelligent I can say here, but I can't think what it might be. Nicely written, anyway.