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My Angel (Free verse) by jroday
Yea tho the angels doth line up to see thy lovely face.
Admiring thy beauty, elegance and grace.
Mortals too are trembling at the sight their eyes doth see.
Mine heart doth give thanks, for this lady who stood by me.
Never caring what the world outside doth feel, for as we rode this
roller coster of life, we knew that our love was
for real.
Thou didst stroll into my life at a time when I was so all along,
whispering into the darkness, inspiring mine soul to
happily moan.
Watching thy nakedness dance around playfully for mine eyes to see.
Surely thou doth knowest ye were tailor made in Heaven for me.
I have been to hell and back done things a man should never do.
But thou didst turn me inside out, for that, I shalt dedicate my love
forever to you.
Ye have breathed life back into a flower that had wilted and died.
Having thee in mine life, is worth all the tears mine eyes
have cried.
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.3333335
Weighted score: 4.9205313
Overall Rank: 9469
Posted: February 12, 2005 2:33 AM PST; Last modified: February 12, 2005 2:33 AM PST
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Line 1 - "doth" is spelled "doeth", but should be "do" in the plural, or just leave it out. Other lines similar.
"shalt" should be "shall" after an I.
"surely thou doth knowest" -> surely thou knowest
"inspiring my soul to happily moan" - good line.