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The wait (Free verse) by aliena I waited and waited
Thinking, with each passing year
The verse that would come forth
Would be better.
Not writing was good-
It was just waiting.
One fine day,I found
That wisdom had wiped off poetry
Peace and stillness overtaken joy.
Up the ladder:
untitled
Down the ladder:
why there are no virgins
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Posted: June 18, 2007 12:34 AM PDT; Last modified: June 18, 2007 12:34 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.9205313 Overall Rank: 9531 Comments:
The voices in my head are crying 'image! image!' Perhaps play around with the sound of 'poetry' and make it sound like 'pottery' - something being wiped off clay. I'd like that.
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seems a little clumsy - I think it's the "that would come" not sure about it. It mucked up the flow for me. Also, you could drop the 'that' from the second to last line. I liked the musings within this piece.