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The wait (Free verse) by aliena

I waited and waited Thinking, with each passing year The verse that would come forth Would be better. Not writing was good- It was just waiting. One fine day,I found That wisdom had wiped off poetry Peace and stillness overtaken joy.

Skamper 19-Jun-07/2:22 AM
"The verse that would come forth"
seems a little clumsy - I think it's the "that would come" not sure about it. It mucked up the flow for me. Also, you could drop the 'that' from the second to last line. I liked the musings within this piece.




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