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Fat girls Who Wear Short Skirts During Winter Quarter (Free verse) by DurtKL
Fat girls wearing short skirts During winter quarter While the hot girls Hibernate in gyms Climbing stairs that go nowhere As the clanking and grunting Of creatine infused juggernauts Grunt and huff away Over weighted bars and disks These fat girls who wear short skirts Lumber towards their classes As the wind blows head on Into sails of fat rippling waves Around their cankles Snow gathers atop the crest of These feminine Kilimanjaros Wide base bodies Against the cold of winter quarter Frosted air escapes lungs as breath Is expelled at the idiocy of these Fat girls who wear skirts during winter quarter.

Up the ladder: The painted Chair
Down the ladder: Writers' Block

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.7272725
Weighted score: 6.3636365
Overall Rank: 817
Posted: March 7, 2005 6:36 PM PST; Last modified: March 7, 2005 6:36 PM PST
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Comments:
[0] RION12 @ 64.136.26.226 | 7-Mar-05/7:11 PM | Reply
What is the point to this poem?
[n/a] DurtKL @ 65.60.139.26 > RION12 | 7-Mar-05/7:18 PM | Reply
It has more point than all your poems combined little girl.
You're the kind of poemranker who votes the only anonymous 10 on her poems.
FOR SHAME!
btw eminem is a rapper, not a singer.
and scooby doo hates you
[0] RION12 @ 64.136.26.226 > DurtKL | 7-Mar-05/7:29 PM | Reply
Number one bitch you don't know me so don't say shit to me.
Number two don't ever call me a little girl again. 'Cause I may be small but I can do a lot of things you can't.
Like I said on my profile I don't care what you say or think.
Bitch go suck a dick.
[n/a] DurtKL @ 65.60.139.26 > RION12 | 7-Mar-05/7:33 PM | Reply
"y'all don't know me! y'all don't know me"

go on maury povich or something. uh!
maybe you maury and connie chung could engage in a verbal Menage a trois
[10] Stephen Robins @ 213.146.148.199 | 8-Mar-05/5:23 AM | Reply
have you ever been to Cardiff? - 10 -
[n/a] DurtKL @ 65.60.139.26 > Stephen Robins | 8-Mar-05/1:23 PM | Reply
no, why do you ask?
[10] Stephen Robins @ 213.146.148.199 > DurtKL | 9-Mar-05/1:31 AM | Reply
Cardiff, the capital city of Wales (an EU sponsored principality of England), is a city rife with the corpulent females you describe above. On a Saturday night I have found myself face to breast with their bulbous, pallid, vein infused flesh. I feel your poem lacks commentary on the fact pretty much every chap in the world has ended up jockeying one of these engorged gwats when he has had little too much sauce.
[n/a] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 > Stephen Robins | 15-Oct-06/2:28 PM | Reply
Oh how I laughed at your comment, sir. It's funny 'cos it's true.

You don't want to be there on a Saturday anyway. That's when all the wideboys (and girls) from the valleys come down and the students all go elsewhere. Try Thursday next time, or Monday at the union.
[10] edpeterson @ 68.79.52.31 | 8-Mar-05/9:59 AM | Reply
yah. this gives me a chubby.
[10] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 4.224.9.93 | 8-Mar-05/2:37 PM | Reply
Whats sad is its true, but funny none the less, welcome back.

<3 Jason
[10] MacFrantic @ 152.163.100.67 | 8-Mar-05/9:20 PM | Reply
RION12
Q.If these "bitches" don't know anything about you,
nor do you care about them, nor do they have the
irrelevant ability to do things that you can do,
nor can they say shit to you, and you care more
about their ability to perform oral sex on a man
than the poem itself, then why comment?

A. you're a douchebag, and this poem is very
original and very good.
*10*
[8] Rainbow_chaser @ 70.50.62.135 | 9-Mar-05/8:20 AM | Reply
well im not sure what to say here, its a well writen poem, hats off to that. can say im supper big on the shallowness i felt while reading this one tho.. i still say 8 for the lay out and poem.
~Autumn
[9] nypoet22 @ 70.149.108.201 | 9-Sep-06/1:36 PM | Reply
i somehow have the sense that i've seen this form before. or maybe it's just a bit similar to other forms. in any case the repetition works very well. the topic is a little on the cutesy side, but it's blunt, tight and well-addressed. one may criticize the poem as insensitive to the issues dealt with by the obese, but anyone who can't figure out the point probably needs hooked on phonics.
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