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Fat girls Who Wear Short Skirts During Winter Quarter (Free verse) by DurtKL Fat girls wearing short skirts
During winter quarter
While the hot girls
Hibernate in gyms
Climbing stairs that go nowhere
As the clanking and grunting
Of creatine infused juggernauts
Grunt and huff away
Over weighted bars and disks
These fat girls who wear short skirts
Lumber towards their classes
As the wind blows head on
Into sails of fat rippling waves
Around their cankles
Snow gathers atop the crest of
These feminine Kilimanjaros
Wide base bodies
Against the cold of winter quarter
Frosted air escapes lungs as breath
Is expelled at the idiocy of these
Fat girls who wear skirts during winter quarter.
Up the ladder:
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Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.7272725
Posted: March 7, 2005 6:36 PM PST; Last modified: March 7, 2005 6:36 PM PSTWeighted score: 6.3636365 Overall Rank: 817 Comments:
have you ever been to Cardiff? - 10 -
no, why do you ask?
Cardiff, the capital city of Wales (an EU sponsored principality of England), is a city rife with the corpulent females you describe above. On a Saturday night I have found myself face to breast with their bulbous, pallid, vein infused flesh. I feel your poem lacks commentary on the fact pretty much every chap in the world has ended up jockeying one of these engorged gwats when he has had little too much sauce.
Oh how I laughed at your comment, sir. It's funny 'cos it's true.
You don't want to be there on a Saturday anyway. That's when all the wideboys (and girls) from the valleys come down and the students all go elsewhere. Try Thursday next time, or Monday at the union.
yah. this gives me a chubby.
Whats sad is its true, but funny none the less, welcome back.
<3 Jason
RION12
Q.If these "bitches" don't know anything about you, nor do you care about them, nor do they have the irrelevant ability to do things that you can do, nor can they say shit to you, and you care more about their ability to perform oral sex on a man than the poem itself, then why comment? A. you're a douchebag, and this poem is very original and very good. *10*
well im not sure what to say here, its a well writen poem, hats off to that. can say im supper big on the shallowness i felt while reading this one tho.. i still say 8 for the lay out and poem.
~Autumn
i somehow have the sense that i've seen this form before. or maybe it's just a bit similar to other forms. in any case the repetition works very well. the topic is a little on the cutesy side, but it's blunt, tight and well-addressed. one may criticize the poem as insensitive to the issues dealt with by the obese, but anyone who can't figure out the point probably needs hooked on phonics.
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You're the kind of poemranker who votes the only anonymous 10 on her poems.
FOR SHAME!
btw eminem is a rapper, not a singer.
and scooby doo hates you
Number two don't ever call me a little girl again. 'Cause I may be small but I can do a lot of things you can't.
Like I said on my profile I don't care what you say or think.
Bitch go suck a dick.
go on maury povich or something. uh!
maybe you maury and connie chung could engage in a verbal Menage a trois