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The painted Chair (Free verse) by Sunshine Conkey I keep my paintbrush with me, where ever I may go,
in case I need to cover up,
so the REAL me don't show.
I'm so afraid to show you me, afraid of what you'll do.
you might laugh or say mean things,
I'm afraid I may lose you.
I'd like to remove all my paintcoats, to show the real me.
But I want you to try & understand,
I want you to like what you see.
So, if you'll be patient & close your eyes
I'll strip off my coats real slow;
please understand how much it hurts,
to let the real me show.
Now all the coats are off. I feel naked, bare and cold
If you still love me, and all that you see
you are my friend....pure as gold.
But I need to save my paintbrush and hold it in my hand
I want to keep it handy
in case somebody doesn't understand
So please protect me, my dear friend
and thanks for loving me true;
but please let me keep my paintbrush with me
until I love me too!
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Posted: April 17, 2004 2:43 PM PDT; Last modified: April 17, 2004 2:43 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.3636365 Overall Rank: 816 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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17-Apr-04/3:00 PM
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The poem is cute, but the title seems a stretch.
I like it, but I agree. How'd you come up with the title?
cute. Yeah, not crazy about the title either, whether you like being sat on or not.
old chairs get scratched up,glued together or whatever
then keep getting repainted to look nice. But under all that pretty presentable paint it's still the same old chair. and whats wrong with the chair showing all its original charm...as long as the legs (foundation of the chair) is still strong enough to hold it up and serve its purpose?
Do you see how no matter how you screw with the format, your poems are all essentially the same, stylistically?
-Genuinely Curious in AZ
How about titling it just 'the painted'? I really like the poem though. Everyone talks about their walls, this is original(At least to me)
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