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Plastic Explosive Iraqi-Man (Free verse) by Enkidu The day after the end of the casteless world
A maskless god touched vanity as it lie
But despite the pleading grace of anonymity
We perished
The golden sands of earth burned away to fire
Glass borders unveiled a machine-gun eulogy
Echoes ringing through the stoney chapels
Or tombs
A papered cleric invited the moon to pray
Line by line space divided time; a statue
Ran away wind and bastardized creation
Broken
Up the ladder:
My Heroes
Down the ladder:
A Fistful of Haiku for All Ages
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Posted: April 5, 2004 8:11 PM PDT; Last modified: April 5, 2004 9:23 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.4034123 Overall Rank: 3151 Comments:
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zodiac @ 67.240.155.82
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5-Apr-04/9:14 PM
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"The day after the end of the castless world" -- can you explain what this means?
Sorry, castless should be cast-e-less.
But the current meaning could be interpreted as if the world was devoid of people, or its "cast."
"The day after the end of the cast-e-less world" -- can you explain what this means?
Have a 5 just because I don't know what you are talking about or how it relates to the title.
Ineresting style, I like it.
Feels like a synthesis of something, if you told me it was generated via a program I would not be surprised - nor would I like it any less.
Ah, middle-eastern inspiration. I can't believe people failed to get this.
-Enkidu -D. $ Fontera
Perhaps it was because you had some wonderful insight about the middle east and people dying or whatever and then you proceeded to write as vaguely as possible.
You appear to be in complete agreement with the Deleted User above. perhaps a déjà vu of some fantasy in dream-like romantic menory.
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