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Your Eyes Are Like Stearling Saphires in the month of June (Free verse) by tisa7 As I release my painful sighs
I look into your beautiful eyes
It's like gazing through space
" Oh what a beautiful place"
Up the ladder:
the gold rush
Down the ladder:
Plastic Explosive Iraqi-Man
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.5
Posted: January 27, 2005 1:27 PM PST; Last modified: January 27, 2005 3:01 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.4034123 Overall Rank: 3155 Comments:
simple but pretty.
thank you me and a friend thought of it while thinking of our boy friends
The title is beautiful but I think you meant Sterling not Stearling. Also this is not free verse. Free verse doesn't have a rhyme pattern this poem does- AABB.
Don't give yourself anonymous 10's or ask your friends to, it's not worth losing your dignity. Are you serious about learnig to write poetry or are you just experimenting?
Free verse doesn't have a rhyming pattern? I beg to differ. If one were to write a rhymed poem which didn't conform to any set structure, it's fine to call it a free verse, surely?
Agreed about the anon 10s
i dont put my own 10's i would rather see what people think cause thats why i put poems on here
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"Sterling", "Sapphires" and "threw" should be "through" and I don't know if you meant "painful" or did the painflu on purpose.
"in to" should prolly be "into"