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Your Eyes Are Like Stearling Saphires in the month of June (Free verse) by tisa7
As I release my painful sighs I look into your beautiful eyes It's like gazing through space " Oh what a beautiful place"


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Arithmetic Mean: 6.5
Weighted score: 5.4034123
Overall Rank: 3153
Posted: January 27, 2005 1:27 PM PST; Last modified: January 27, 2005 3:01 PM PST
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[8] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.52 | 27-Jan-05/2:37 PM | Reply
Hi t7 - a pretty thing, but a couple spellings:

"Sterling", "Sapphires" and "threw" should be "through" and I don't know if you meant "painful" or did the painflu on purpose.

"in to" should prolly be "into"
[8] wilco @ 24.165.207.93 | 27-Jan-05/6:47 PM | Reply
simple but pretty.
[n/a] tisa7 @ 4.10.233.198 | 27-Jan-05/7:29 PM | Reply
thank you me and a friend thought of it while thinking of our boy friends
[3] god'swife @ 71.103.98.44 | 30-Mar-06/7:12 PM | Reply
The title is beautiful but I think you meant Sterling not Stearling. Also this is not free verse. Free verse doesn't have a rhyme pattern this poem does- AABB.

Don't give yourself anonymous 10's or ask your friends to, it's not worth losing your dignity. Are you serious about learnig to write poetry or are you just experimenting?
[n/a] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 > god'swife | 31-Mar-06/3:46 AM | Reply
Free verse doesn't have a rhyming pattern? I beg to differ. If one were to write a rhymed poem which didn't conform to any set structure, it's fine to call it a free verse, surely?
Agreed about the anon 10s
[n/a] tisa7 @ 169.139.225.2 > god'swife | 3-Jun-06/11:29 AM | Reply
i dont put my own 10's i would rather see what people think cause thats why i put poems on here
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