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Your Eyes Are Like Stearling Saphires in the month of June (Free verse) by tisa7

As I release my painful sighs I look into your beautiful eyes It's like gazing through space " Oh what a beautiful place"

Shuushin 27-Jan-05/2:37 PM
Hi t7 - a pretty thing, but a couple spellings:

"Sterling", "Sapphires" and "threw" should be "through" and I don't know if you meant "painful" or did the painflu on purpose.

"in to" should prolly be "into"




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