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The Observer

Member since 2003 · Posted 3 May 2005 · Edited 12 May 2005 · 6 comments

I can influence the future I am not alone I am connected to it all So you are too It is my belief that our purpose here, is to learn how to be responsible creators I have the freedom to be woven into any possibility Consciousness is the ground of all being through observation I simply am in heaven I can go from any form to any emotion because they are the same Atoms, ideas, strings There is no reward The mind is a storm The cruelest tyrannical trick we have played upon ourselves is religion, war, disease, and ignorance How far down the rabbit hole do I want to go? It doesn't matter, as long as I go And I want you, to come with me.

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[5] unknown^user 12-May-05/8:51 AM Reply

*belief instead of believe
Comes off as somewhat pretentious, and loses its focus somewhat in the third part (after "because they are the same").

[n/a] Jeremi B. Handrinos › unknown^user 12-May-05/11:54 AM Reply

thanks.

[7] Dovina 12-May-05/12:10 PM Reply

It tackles too many topics in the second half to be strong in any of them. Would do better to stick with the "I can influence the future" theme.

[n/a] Alizarin_Crimson 12-May-05/8:11 PM Reply

Love "How far down the rabbit hole do I want to go?" that is a great line.

[7] INTRANSIT 16-May-05/9:22 AM Reply

You owe me two bucks for using my Rabbit hole. I'll take a discount on your book.

[8] SupremeDreamer 16-May-05/11:32 AM Reply

Alice, there are many who await you in earnest in the depths of this chaotic rabbit hole. You need not a partner, all is good and safe... if thou art a madman ofcourse.