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The Observer (Free verse) by Jeremi B. Handrinos

I can influence the future I am not alone I am connected to it all So you are too It is my belief that our purpose here, is to learn how to be responsible creators I have the freedom to be woven into any possibility Consciousness is the ground of all being through observation I simply am in heaven I can go from any form to any emotion because they are the same Atoms, ideas, strings There is no reward The mind is a storm The cruelest tyrannical trick we have played upon ourselves is religion, war, disease, and ignorance How far down the rabbit hole do I want to go? It doesn't matter, as long as I go And I want you, to come with me.

Dovina 12-May-05/12:10 PM
It tackles too many topics in the second half to be strong in any of them. Would do better to stick with the "I can influence the future" theme.




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