Re: 22nd Anniversary by Frass	11-Sep-02/12:09 PM
I can smell those herbs. "Asurety surely", trips up the tongue but makes me smile. Like you say "vibrant", that's how i find the whole piece. 8.
Re: Avian Child by Tekara	11-Sep-02/11:53 AM
Enjoyable. Excellent first two stanza's. I found the third weaker overall, I would think about cutting it. Just the last line jarred...I think the "not FAIR" exclamation sounds slightly juvenile. The poem said so much to me until then, that last line seemed to cheapen it. I find the scenario you have built, more than just... unfair...something stronger....cheated? 8.
Re: Putney at Low Tide by Christof	10-Sep-02/2:39 PM
"Beshitten". Someone contact the Oxford new words dept:) Outstanding imagery. 9.
Re: Thank You Mom by savannah	10-Sep-02/2:33 PM
Thanks, but no thanks. Borderline nauseating.1. (Hey I'm sure your "mom" will give it 10.)
Re: while you are away on the islands by poetandknowit	10-Sep-02/2:30 PM
Beautiful but ever so slightly uninteresting. Can't fault the word choice or structure, can't award anything less than a 9 in fairness, but don't feel "rewarded" for having read it...if you know what i mean?
Re: My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus	10-Sep-02/2:28 PM
Charming.
Re: Words by PawnedTidal	10-Sep-02/12:49 PM
A little obvious.5.
Re: Oaxaca city fragment by poetandknowit	10-Sep-02/12:43 PM
Hard to read, guess that makes it well written? Hard to give a particularly good score to something so unpleasant.7. Hey, enough of the poetry advice, you need some travel guidance...next time go to Taxco, it's pretty. Come to think of it Mexico City seems better than the place you describe :). Hell, make that 8, it makes me feel good about living in the UK.
Re: Mean Matt was so mean, when a homeless guy asked him for change he gave him a -blank- by beakism	8-Sep-02/9:46 AM
Good God. "I hate this", and that is one badly drawn fish.0.
Re: I'm Sorry by PawnedTidal	8-Sep-02/9:28 AM
A little work required on stanza two, lines three and four. Not too sure that "compare" was the right choice of word, doesn't seem to make literal sense. Other wise promising.6.
Re: Her Wildfire Addiction by molly	1-Sep-02/1:17 PM
Cigarette poems seem extremely popular and frankly i think this poem stinks. I'm very rarely hyper critical and will certainly read a selection of a poets work if i have a negative reaction to one of their pieces. I hope i like another piece better. The last stanza sounds like it was written by someone who does not use English as their first language. "Oh Mama"! .0.
Re: Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit	1-Sep-02/1:05 PM
One of the best things I've read here for some time. Frankly i like something with a bit of edge. This is up there with the other bloke ;) (but edgier). Love the way the title suggests the poem is ambiguous, yet for me it has just the right balance between ambiguity and plain narrative. Too much obscure imagary around here for me lately. This cuts through some of the wool like a knife.10 (and i'm fussy).
Re: The Stifling Moment by vulcan	31-Aug-02/2:42 AM
I like it, can't put my finger on why. Is there a haiku in there struggling to get out? No, it probably couldn't be edited that far. Still, paints a vivid picture..8..(and a half if we had them)
Re: Terror Too Tranquil by RaychelW	31-Aug-02/2:36 AM
A disturbing subject, deftly handled. 8.
Re: Dignity by kthulah	23-Aug-02/10:36 AM
A liberal sprinkling of the Olde English at work here. Mostly pleasant. Dare I mention the word cliche with respect to "loving from afar". Like the conclusion. Loving someone more than ones own dignity is never recommended, but frequently tends to happen. 8.
Re: Hunny by Venus	22-Aug-02/1:36 PM
Thank God. A gem surfaced in the random file, I was losing hope....excellent work...the image a person being "quitely mauled" will stay with me for some time. Excellent word choice, conjures up genuine feelings of disgust and disquiet.9.
Re: "to do" list:accomplished by razorgrin	21-Aug-02/2:36 PM
The jury is out on the syllables in fire. But as an antithesis to the ubiquitous, gentle, natural world of wonder style haiku, I'll buy it. 9.
Re: The Confession by [mojo]	21-Aug-02/2:13 PM
Wow. I'm new...there's a limit. Oh well, I'm on the voting prowl 'till next week.
Re: The Confession by [mojo]	21-Aug-02/2:11 PM
Ha ha ha (Evil laugh). Sorry..here.I'll post something lighter.
Re: Secret, Admirer by <~>	21-Aug-02/1:34 PM
Ok, I see that now. We'll have to debate whether that was too cryptic or I'm just slow! I see that it works now, but, and this is the tricky bit. If a word-play/suggestion only "works" when it's been explained (nee "deciphered"), does that mean it works well or not? I'd be interested to know if anyone else understood precisely what this stanza was suggesting prior to explaination. It really is unlike me to miss pseudo-sexual references. I'm ashamed of myself.