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22nd Anniversary (Free verse) by Frass May 8th, a beautiful day
For a radiantly beautiful woman like you
To breathe in the sweetly scented Blue Ridge air
Where you are
Too far from here
Your star rises amid the herbs and flowers
As you admire the bowers along your way
Play at life with intensity
Lay aside bitter roots and brambles
Stay by your own pure inner voice of asurety
Surely, your blooming is a loving thing
Bathe in langorous fern goddess ablution
Your pangs and pains are past
Your vibrant solution
Is living
Up the ladder:
Wednesday's Breaking
Down the ladder:
A gift
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.25
Posted: July 9, 2002 4:37 PM PDT; Last modified: July 9, 2002 4:37 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.1009965 Overall Rank: 1130 Comments:
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7-Aug-02/9:07 PM
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nice, the way 'bitter' has a positive aspect in this piece. shapes my view of her more than any other, except maybe the last
Good good good! Surely your blooming is a lovely thing sounds wonderful. Great 8/10
This is just lovely. I don't know what's in that Blue Ridge Air but I'd like some
this smells like another father of the bride sequal...this time...in.. norfolk..so positive and uplifting...awe...and it makes you think too...alot...lots of braincells are up there right now...in my huge mind just...wow..smelling flowers, and solutions..and i don't even remember what i was mad about...oh yes...here it comes...the joyful glee...la.la.la.laaaaaaaaaaaAAAAAAAAAAAA
I can smell those herbs. "Asurety surely", trips up the tongue but makes me smile. Like you say "vibrant", that's how i find the whole piece. 8.
I'm glad this got your mojo working, mojo. Strongly influenced by 'Poem in October' by D. Thomas.
That's interesting Frass. I'll check that out.
Very touching 10
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