Re: Nothing by greym0on	1-Sep-03/8:59 AM
At least this unrequited love is good fuel for poetry.
Re: Untitled II by greym0on	1-Sep-03/8:56 AM
"Your arms that were just long enough to wrap around me" - this didn't quite work for me, made me think that this love of your was a small child. It is a good thing I am in a dramatic & romatic mood today- 9
Re: Untitled by greym0on	1-Sep-03/8:51 AM
beautiful, even if it is overly gushy.
Re: a comment on goofy poem to prove I'm not morbid (Ode to an Onion) by greym0on	1-Sep-03/8:47 AM
I disagree, onion breath is sexy. Especially the onion breath one can't get rid of after they brush their teeth, all the other bad breath gone, and just that current of garlicy onion remains. I would accept Eve's onion-y temptation, even if it meant being expelled from Paradise.
Re: Shi by William Delacroix	1-Sep-03/8:39 AM
What a waste of your recyclable organs, to publish the product on poemranker, where all poems, even the worst of them, are underappreciated. Anyway, I think it was a great poem- but wouldn't kill myself for its writing. 10
Re: True Respect (A Distant Adoration) by abecedarian	1-Sep-03/8:18 AM
Beautiful. I like "buzzing mass of fickle need". But then, I'm fickle.
Re: a comment on Women have Babies and Men Murder. by horus8	21-Aug-03/6:27 PM
According to a recent Dear Abby that I couldn't stop myself from reading, 1 in 5 Americans have herpes. 20%! (Abby told the wife not to stay with her cheating husband who gave her the herpes - said she ought not fear that she'd never find a man who would "have her" because of her herpes- since there are so many more out there with herpes.)
Re: A Manifesto on Murder by Jeremi B. Handrinos	21-Aug-03/6:15 PM
You forgot private, for-profit prisons (if you have money to invest in stock, and you don't care about what atrocities you are encouraging, this is the place to make some money) and the psychologists and social workers who evaluate the convicted murderers when the death penalty is in question. S'quite lucrative.
Re: Provacation by J.B. Manning	20-Aug-03/5:05 PM
I'm pro-vacation too. I would like to take this moment to celebrate the end of my 90 day probationary period at my current job. Anyway, you don't need "sort-of" in front of gestation. Interesting piece.
Re: The Better of the Sea by abecedarian	20-Aug-03/4:58 PM
I hope the narrator was doing something productive during his/her sailing time. Not just sailing because he/she is rich. What is the metaphor? Failing relationship?
Re: play to win by peaceseeker	20-Aug-03/4:20 PM
Liked your revisions, I loved the "raped mouth" part. Some parts were hard to follow, though.
Re: summer heat blues by peaceseeker	20-Aug-03/4:12 PM
All in one night? Jerry (Garcia) wanna be? I liked the "tickle" with "hermaphrodite pickle".
Re: a comment on Sagadahoc to Hudson by http://mulberryfairy	13-Aug-03/8:31 PM
God's wife, thanks for all of your thinking on this sad poem. I will take it back in and try to nourish it to health with your feedback. That height sick thing was added recently to try to point out that the Hudson and the Sagadahoc are rivers, because INTRANSIT thought they were counties, and thus commented on the unlikelihood of the route this poem's Greyhound took through Connecticut. I will take it back out. But I do hate to go over a bridge when I can see over the rails. Thanks G's Wife, you are so good to me!
Re: Twenty Cigarette Burns Ago by DurtKL	13-Aug-03/8:22 PM
I think that is beautiful, seriously.
Re: trying to cross the border to Sweetgrass by Patsy	13-Aug-03/8:20 PM
I like the repition of "under a".
Re: why am i still thinking about blood? by Patsy	13-Aug-03/8:18 PM
I loved these lines. "i see the fresh PALM Pilots dashed whole from the Rock, i try not to look where they pile up."
Re: The Lordy only knows why tornados have no nose by Bachus	13-Aug-03/8:03 PM
Why would anyone need 2 games of twister? I hate Twister, I always end up with my hand next to some kid's sweaty socked foot.
Re: on your birthday by peaceseeker	13-Aug-03/7:58 PM
Use some word other than "precious" 2x. I would paranthesize "(not his birthday)". I hope your friend's bird-day was happy.
Re: A quivering boob by horus8	13-Aug-03/7:55 PM
This is the ultimate betrayal, now that I know and love you I find that you just want to sever my quivering boob? (and why just one?) I, too, have this interest in breasts, but have directed it to a healthier outlet. (that is right, I am a lactation consultant)
Re: a comment on Maine Freeze by http://mulberryfairy	12-Aug-03/8:36 PM
Ah, another Mainah, that explains why it depresses you. I love winter because I'm not native to Maine. I grew up with scandalously warm winters, in a city 4 times bigger than Portland with maybe 3 snowplows for the city. If it snowed 3 inches, we'd be out of school for a week.