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Maine Freeze (Free verse) by http://mulberryfairy
Each morning, the ice is broken to free the boats the slabs lay scattered, defeated. At night, the freeze spreads like bacteria into a thick, new coat of secrecy. I remember my mother telling stories about the icebergs in Lake Michigan how those mountains of ice terrified her childself. When I saw the frozen Atlantic for the first time I could only gape in awe of its primitive power. What a manmade way to live: United States Coast Guard breaking the ice each morning for the Islanders commute to work or Wal-mart. I stood there gazing at the captive ocean absentmindedly holding my breath only remembering the necessity of oxygen when I saw those cracks, where the warmer tide still fought to escape out from under the ice.

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.6
Weighted score: 5.190725
Overall Rank: 4664
Posted: August 10, 2003 7:47 PM PDT; Last modified: August 11, 2003 7:40 AM PDT
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[10] Lifeboatman @ 202.78.97.13 | 10-Aug-03/8:03 PM | Reply
loved it... very detailed description.. makes me want to see it too... 10
[9] Caducus @ 62.105.119.105 | 11-Aug-03/1:53 AM | Reply
Well depicted and you took me there. I must get round to reading your other stuff = 9

One thing L4,S2 (the ocean)
[n/a] http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.145.128 > Caducus | 11-Aug-03/7:41 AM | Reply
Thanks, I did alter it there.
[n/a] http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.145.128 | 11-Aug-03/8:52 AM | Reply
Nobody's noticed, (not that I'd expect you to) so I will have to give it away myself! This poem is named after southern Maine's women's contact football team "Maine Freeze". Oh, the power!
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.252.7 > http://mulberryfairy | 11-Aug-03/5:34 PM | Reply
now THAT would get me to go back to Maine.
[n/a] http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.146.64 > INTRANSIT | 12-Aug-03/9:26 AM | Reply
I wouldn't be so sure! I used to work weekends at a gym where they practiced when the weather was inclimate.
[9] Caducus @ 62.105.119.105 | 11-Aug-03/8:57 AM | Reply
Here is your 9 again ---------------
[8] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 11-Aug-03/6:34 PM | Reply
Some very good lines here.

"absentmindedly holding my breath"

Was my fave. I often do that, especially for some reason when I'm writing.
[n/a] peaceseeker @ 24.97.224.6 | 12-Aug-03/2:06 PM | Reply
-like "slabs lay scattered, defeated"; like reference to "childself," although could use more explanation; this poem depresses me a little bit, however, when it's over I want more - say more about the warmer tide fighting to escape from under the ice - the last two lines seem to get smothered under the "layers of ice."
[n/a] http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.145.161 > peaceseeker | 12-Aug-03/8:36 PM | Reply
Ah, another Mainah, that explains why it depresses you. I love winter because I'm not native to Maine. I grew up with scandalously warm winters, in a city 4 times bigger than Portland with maybe 3 snowplows for the city. If it snowed 3 inches, we'd be out of school for a week.
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