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Twenty Cigarette Burns Ago

by DurtKL

Member since 2003 · Posted 24 Jun 2003 · Edited 12 Aug 2003 · 6 comments

He burned His intials into his left chest with twenty cigarettes, each circle was varnished By sweat and JD. The pain was incredible. Justifying every breath taken Since the first one; Twenty cigarette burns ago. Tears formed in her eyes When she saw the bubbling blisters formed over burnt black flesh. That stretched scar on her stomach ached as it did that day twenty years ago. The same tears that Flowed from her eyes Twenty cigarette burns worth ago.

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[6] Shardik 24-Jun-03/11:11 PM Reply
What, No Tylenol?
[n/a] DurtKL › Shardik 25-Jun-03/9:12 PM Reply
She switched to advil
and midol for cramps
[7] SupremeDreamer 25-Jun-03/3:36 AM Reply
Sad, yes it is when women do such things.
[8] Caducus 13-Aug-03/5:37 AM Reply
Love the title and the repetition of it works well in contrast with the poem. Some good stuff today on here 8
[8] Caducus 13-Aug-03/5:37 AM Reply
Lyric?
[9] http://mulberryfairy 13-Aug-03/8:22 PM Reply
I think that is beautiful, seriously.