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Twenty Cigarette Burns Ago (Free verse) by DurtKL
He burned His intials into his left chest with twenty cigarettes, each circle was varnished By sweat and JD. The pain was incredible. Justifying every breath taken Since the first one; Twenty cigarette burns ago. Tears formed in her eyes When she saw the bubbling blisters formed over burnt black flesh. That stretched scar on her stomach ached as it did that day twenty years ago. The same tears that Flowed from her eyes Twenty cigarette burns worth ago.

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.3333335
Weighted score: 5.62753
Overall Rank: 2185
Posted: June 24, 2003 9:49 PM PDT; Last modified: August 12, 2003 11:16 PM PDT
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[6] Shardik @ 24.126.113.154 | 24-Jun-03/11:11 PM | Reply
What, No Tylenol?
[n/a] DurtKL @ 68.75.20.138 > Shardik | 25-Jun-03/9:12 PM | Reply
She switched to advil
and midol for cramps
[7] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.168.70 | 25-Jun-03/3:36 AM | Reply
Sad, yes it is when women do such things.
[8] Caducus @ 62.105.119.105 | 13-Aug-03/5:37 AM | Reply
Love the title and the repetition of it works well in contrast with the poem. Some good stuff today on here 8
[8] Caducus @ 62.105.119.105 | 13-Aug-03/5:37 AM | Reply
Lyric?
[9] http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.146.144 | 13-Aug-03/8:22 PM | Reply
I think that is beautiful, seriously.
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