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why am i still thinking about blood? (Free verse) by Patsy
The more i stand here bleeding the bigger the picture. i feel as the egg to the vessel is and waiting, i'm waiting sheltered, they the virility, they the man-chores i don't like this feeling. i know longer i no longer know if i see the forest for the trees or if i forgot what a tree was. Am i the (wo)man who mistook his wife for a hat? i see the fresh PALM Pilots dashed whole from the Rock, i try not to look where they pile up. We have a heavy continent, kids.

Up the ladder: Tuning Fork
Down the ladder: Shi

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.4
Weighted score: 5.0476813
Overall Rank: 6862
Posted: August 13, 2003 5:35 AM PDT; Last modified: August 13, 2003 5:35 AM PDT
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[6] basit_i @ 209.148.205.13 | 13-Aug-03/2:57 PM | Reply
hrm. for some reason, i liked "unburden" much better. the last line is more *you*, i think, than most of the rest.
[8] http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.146.144 | 13-Aug-03/8:18 PM | Reply
I loved these lines.
"i see the fresh PALM Pilots dashed whole
from the Rock, i
try not to look
where they pile up."
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