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why am i still thinking about blood? (Free verse) by Patsy

The more i stand here bleeding the bigger the picture. i feel as the egg to the vessel is and waiting, i'm waiting sheltered, they the virility, they the man-chores i don't like this feeling. i know longer i no longer know if i see the forest for the trees or if i forgot what a tree was. Am i the (wo)man who mistook his wife for a hat? i see the fresh PALM Pilots dashed whole from the Rock, i try not to look where they pile up. We have a heavy continent, kids.

basit_i 13-Aug-03/2:57 PM
hrm. for some reason, i liked "unburden" much better. the last line is more *you*, i think, than most of the rest.




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