Re: Love Till the End by swat472	14-Sep-02/2:22 AM
a bit greetings cardy .... heart's in almost the right place though , i think ..... 3
Re: deluge by kawakurdi	14-Sep-02/2:20 AM
imho the alliteration is overdone ..... 4
Re: Kept Safe by trev086	14-Sep-02/2:15 AM
one way is to wait till the words come and apply to a situation rather than finding words for a poetical situation ... 3
Re: America the Beautiful? by pink_punk_kisses87	14-Sep-02/2:12 AM
from my perspective it's killing the indians ... sorry , native americans .. that made part of the americas great .... 3
Re: cival by dylansong	14-Sep-02/2:08 AM
same poison as the future too ... a day like any other for the world ... 4
Re: america's promise by dylansong	14-Sep-02/2:03 AM
A Un painted park bench .... is this a typo or politically subtle ? and are people a pain to the promise or visa versa ? too staccato for me but i live outside the promise and only live with the threat ..... 4
Re: We visited the gay men on the veranda by Frass	14-Sep-02/1:54 AM
there's a lot of it about ; i'm surprised you were surprised . nice pome though ... no need to emphasise your non-gayness methinks ... 5
Re: Satisfaction by Ojiboch	14-Sep-02/1:19 AM
when you get there there's no there there ( D Parker i think) the old human condition again ... 5
Re: Full Fathom Five by vulcan	14-Sep-02/1:16 AM
what crap , one thinks at the start .... then balloons beating bashfully reinforce blueness to grab attention .. and then superior literary knowledge demands more respect ... an interesting acceptance curve ... is nuisant from nuisance or of the night ? .... could i suggest use of (i think ) subjunctive ... were it not for S's sake .... 6
Re: A Man Of The World by vulcan	14-Sep-02/12:58 AM
:-) ..... 5
Re: Remember-me (an ode to those dropped off at the clinic) by Bachus	14-Sep-02/12:45 AM
;-D for the ps . no vote
Re: Persephone by Lynn	14-Sep-02/12:35 AM
bloody 'ell ! .... that woke me up ... 7
Re: Emptiness by Jagang	14-Sep-02/12:32 AM
teen suicide in never memorable except for parents .... we've all been there . maybe nothing matters , but why should it ? .... 2
Re: Inside by Jagang	14-Sep-02/12:28 AM
is you xbsx ? or the new beat generation emerging ? ..... do i care ? ..... 2
Re: Lonely by xblackstarsx	14-Sep-02/12:23 AM
that'as what friends are for ..... a good cry is great but self pity in a poem doesn't do it .. 3
Re: Im different so what? by xblackstarsx	14-Sep-02/12:20 AM
wouldn't worry about them ..... fuck 'em ! ...... 4
Re: Raining in Dream by memorybabe	14-Sep-02/12:18 AM
sounds like its chock-full of meaning ..... couple of typos ( ? ) stop me searching for it ..... 4
Re: Babys Got Blue Eyes by w~* ATHENA *~w	14-Sep-02/12:12 AM
:-) ...... 4
Re: Spellbound by Limness	14-Sep-02/12:01 AM
Gold will tell others the words we have said ..... no comprendo .... the rest has definitely got something , shows feeling and thought ..... your feline escort is plural , is that condensed into your one lover ? ... 6
Re: A Man Of The World by vulcan	13-Sep-02/11:49 PM
sounds like you woke from a nice dream to a nasty reality .... would have worked better for me if fairy fiddle and gate were on separate lines as then killing the gate would have had more impact ..... 4