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Full Fathom Five (Free verse) by vulcan The sky is blue
Bluer still the sea
And balloons beat bashfully on the sand.
Save for the Halcyon's sick sleep
And papers fluttering in the wind
There's nothing nuisant in the air.
I sit near the strand and read aloud
"Far from the madding crowd..."
The girl I loved is five fathom down...
And instead of her eyes you know what you can find.
I'm bound to imageries(though men live and die)
The girl I loved is dead and if you"look in my face"
Terrible things you find.
So it's enough to pretend!
I have read that gray Elegy,
Were it not for Shakespeare's sake
I,too,were full fathom five down the deep.
Up the ladder:
Searching...
Down the ladder:
Impervious
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.8
Posted: September 12, 2002 11:32 PM PDT; Last modified: September 14, 2002 11:18 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.9 Overall Rank: 9865 Comments:
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Christof @ 195.172.133.226
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13-Sep-02/3:21 AM
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I like your turning to literature for comfort and finding some salvation there. 'gray Elegy' also brings to mind Thomas Gray's 'Elegy in a Country Churchyard' - is this deliberate?
this is good, vulcan. may i make a few suggestions, to tighten it up?
By all means!I'll be very grateful.thanks.
I sent you an email. hope you like it.
what crap , one thinks at the start .... then balloons beating bashfully reinforce blueness to grab attention .. and then superior literary knowledge demands more respect ... an interesting acceptance curve ... is nuisant from nuisance or of the night ? .... could i suggest use of (i think ) subjunctive ... were it not for S's sake .... 6
I have to say that 'Far from the madding crowd' is perhaps the most tedious, boring, long, boring, long, tedious piece of writing I have ever been forced to read.
Superior literature my ass. This is stuff they teach you in high school. Besides being rather a yawner in the grand tradition of Hardy the writing falls into the christof school of lacking Umph!!!
Now personal criticism I can take, but dissing Hardy? P&K man, do you not have ears to hear his genius? Shame on you!
I loved old Jude boy although I wanted to slap him, and the Mayor was quite a read, but the woodlanders, crowd, tess and the like...well...zzzzzzzz.
hey, i resemble that remark!
Which is impressive...to come up in conversation quite by accident!
Not the novels, the poems! 'Satires of Circumstance', 'Time's Laughingstock's' - he shits on Swinburne and Tennyson and the whole late Victorian mob with one mordant squat.
Ah yes, the Victorians. Coming to terms with melancholy. Reformists? Dickens! Wilde! Huysmans! I must say, I do like Tennyson (I want Lord in my name) but I prefer Carlyle (although the were both elitists). He is the only poet I have ever read that could put "pusillanimous" into a poem. Now there is talent.
Ever read Arthur Hugh Clough? Good God almighty don't.
Really? I've never been able to cope with him at all. What is it that you like about him? Please tell me, 'cos i'm always open to someone who might be able to change my mind.
rides on the cusp between dark and light, this too is gray. and I like!
Funny, i thought I voted on this before. Did you edit? I still like it.
i too were blee blah blah blee fertin hive in the stroo hore see..ble? you must be a seasoned veteran i'm sure you wont mind me ..broesing around your..ah...innards. 3.
Nicely written, great use of words and reference to Literature.
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