Re: Work by half.italian	21-Oct-06/6:48 AM
lol :)
Re: connect the dots by daniella	21-Oct-06/6:43 AM
I looked at the site and watched the whole film and would recommend any others to do the same; i think this counts as a bit more than a political statement; 10 for the lead 6 for the poem
Re: snot by fattony	11-Oct-06/1:55 PM
started out as yet another edna yet the final line shows a true poetic sensibility ... what else ya got, dude ?
Re: The Mandarin by Caducus	11-Oct-06/1:47 PM
when i'm loving, yet never when i fuck ... yeah, that's nice , the 2 fucks work i think, but how about when you fuck while you're loving ... freud would probably have a ball here...what with dad and all .. :)
Re: Wyndham by Aetius	2-Oct-06/3:54 PM
works well as a childs poem and i quite liked it; but if you're not here for comments or votes may i enquire why you are here?
Re: "Twee" by Ranger	2-Oct-06/3:35 PM
multilayered bit of fun...is it deep....is it ironic ...surely not cynical... a comment on the human condition or aspiration...i give up... enjoyed reading it though :)
Re: untitled by harryparatestes	2-Oct-06/3:28 PM
not that i'm into angels but it would have worked better for me with " angels on every breeze..." ... also "opportunities" .... nit-picking i know but that's what we're here for... nice poem :)
Re: a comment on if really its me by Landon2	21-Sep-06/5:31 PM
sorry, that score should read a 6
Re: if really its me by Landon2	21-Sep-06/5:30 PM
know the feeling :)! ... reads like it should be spoken over beats. If not, i'd introduce more rests and split some lines into 2 or 3 .....
Re: Soup Can by oneglove	21-Sep-06/5:17 PM
my sense of perspective and viewpoint got scrambled between verses 3 and 4; chilling finale and knockout opening... not conviced by self-rhyme of along, though...v3 seems a little clumsy
Re: Weather poem part 6: idols by nypoet22	21-Sep-06/4:58 PM
..... and the best part by far so far imho
Re: a comment on Flea poem by Sing4Jesus!	20-Sep-06/7:50 PM
damn freud with his ego-system small minds inhabit large legends
Re: Upon meeting Mrs Gunn at the Butchers by Mr Pig	16-Sep-06/9:43 AM
curate's egg
Re: Flea poem by Sing4Jesus!	16-Sep-06/9:41 AM
not good;either you really are fulla shit or are trying to overcome a strict christian upbringing, in which case respect, but it has all been done already...mainly in school toilets
Re: a comment on When I look inside my heart by Engelbert Humpalot	16-Sep-06/9:35 AM
not at all
Re: To be alive by nightowl	16-Sep-06/9:34 AM
nice thought, shame about the words
Re: Jose Streets by SupremeDreamer	16-Sep-06/9:30 AM
maybe needs reworking? definitely a story worth the telling, but didn't flow for me... started off fizzing
Re: don't touch me 2 by elderking	16-Sep-06/9:23 AM
the last line needs working on i think ..it does lighten the intensity but is that intentional? does she want to touch him? or was he way out of order?
Re: Morning Glory by moyah8	16-Sep-06/9:08 AM
mmhh...not good, but i like the idea of trailing of into a(prose)observation after being constrained by rhyme ... the lines could be condensed for better flow
Re: When I look inside my heart by Engelbert Humpalot	8-Sep-06/8:02 AM
made me laugh i'm ashamed to admit ....