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Morning Glory (Free verse) by moyah8
As the sun rises and the day begins to unfold, It brings forth a feeing like the first time a story is being told. I am greeted by the softness of your lips. and roll over and gentle take hold of your hips I begin to wonder as I pull you closer to satisfy my hunger. Oh baby, what is this spell that you have got me under, So sweet that I will never try to comprehend cause this magical feeling I’d never want to end You softly whisper in my ear, “Honey please take me now, I no longer feel fear, cause we’ve been lying here all night and it’s more than I can bear”. The warmth of your inside, As me feeling all memorised. You beg for me to go deeper and that’s when I swore I saw the grim reaper. You moan, I groan as we endure such pleasure, this is a moment that we both shall treasure. Now that we are through, we both realise that we have finally done what we though we would never do. And both agree that this was far more than just satisfying a need. Nevertheless, we may not get the chance to do this again, as we’ve both got a significant other.

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.2
Weighted score: 4.7854347
Overall Rank: 11315
Posted: September 15, 2006 2:01 PM PDT; Last modified: September 15, 2006 2:01 PM PDT
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Comments:
[2] half.italian @ 70.36.242.152 | 15-Sep-06/10:35 PM | Reply
Meaningless dribble.
[n/a] moyah8 @ 87.74.2.126 > half.italian | 17-Sep-06/8:49 AM | Reply
Thanks
[2] pete @ 195.92.168.168 | 16-Sep-06/9:08 AM | Reply
mmhh...not good, but i like the idea of trailing of into a(prose)observation after being constrained by rhyme ... the lines could be condensed for better flow
[n/a] moyah8 @ 87.74.2.126 > pete | 17-Sep-06/8:50 AM | Reply
Thnxs
[9] Edna Sweetlove @ 85.210.246.175 | 17-Sep-06/6:25 PM | Reply
I liked the last line. There's nothing like a good horny bit of adultery to get the old juices OOZING!
[n/a] Ranger @ 86.131.60.89 | 18-Sep-06/6:59 AM | Reply
'...and that's when I swore I saw the grim reaper' had me laughing aloud. I'm not sure if you're intending for this to be a 'vulgar' poem like the South Parkers here, or if it's meant in seriousness.

Also, your username made me wonder if it's some kind of horus8 tribute.
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