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Work (Free verse) by half.italian I won't sleep again tonight.
This time
I watched a movie
that reminded me of life
It woke me from boredom
It screamed at me to quit my job
It pointed out that the eight hours
I spend every day
stroking egos
are eight hours I could be sleeping
or fucking
or golfing
I've acted on these thoughts before
and each time I ended up similar
in the end
So
I'll spend the rest of the night
searching for a loop hole
and at eight
I'll go to work.
Up the ladder:
Epilogue
Down the ladder:
Volkswagon
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Posted: October 16, 2006 4:01 AM PDT; Last modified: October 16, 2006 4:01 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.9602656 Overall Rank: 8687 Comments:
"Loophole" is one word. A bit wordy: "This time I watched a movie that reminded me of life It woke me from boredom" could be "A movie woke me from boredom."
The thing I'll say about the poem is that it reads like a paragraph of prose with semi-arbitrary line breaks.
lol :)
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I really need to describe the feeling more elaborately. It's much more complicated than just making me question things. It's extremely empowering, and gives me an incredible euphoria that few things in life compare to. It forces me to question how I live and what is important in life. It makes everything seem possible for a while. This is the feeling that built Hollywood.
While I LOVED "American Beauty" the first thru fifth time I saw it, I recently rented it and was disappointed. It's not a great movie for repeat viewing. Another movie that did this to me and still my favorite movie: "Lost In Translation"
'Crash' had the finest moment of raw emotion in of any film I've ever seen.