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Work (Free verse) by half.italian

I won't sleep again tonight. This time I watched a movie that reminded me of life It woke me from boredom It screamed at me to quit my job It pointed out that the eight hours I spend every day stroking egos are eight hours I could be sleeping or fucking or golfing I've acted on these thoughts before and each time I ended up similar in the end So I'll spend the rest of the night searching for a loop hole and at eight I'll go to work.

Dovina 17-Oct-06/12:56 PM
"Loophole" is one word. A bit wordy: "This time I watched a movie that reminded me of life It woke me from boredom" could be "A movie woke me from boredom."




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